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Guilt of Fall... A duet with Serenity

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Dark Angel
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0 posted 05-29-2001 06:02 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Angel

Guilt of Fall


Behind lidded eyes
of day's gone by
words remain still
to this day
insane

as each sound
EXPOUNDS
in drip
Chinese water tortureless
every day the same
inane

mundane
and weighted
to the ground
I drown

and within death
her surety
I find myself
sheer release
the glory I am after all
even in the guilt of fall

and silence lies
from lines of times
of first words uttered

and remembering
first glance
the sentence that you stuttered

I touched my hand into your hair
and felt the life of God in there
and everything was just before
I only knew I wanted more

beneath our sky
wet with rain
light of earth and dark
of shame
words still remain
letters due
each word a cherished
piece of you


Serenity/ Dark Angel
29/5/01


© Copyright 2001 Dark Angel - All Rights Reserved
ethome
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1 posted 05-29-2001 06:07 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Fabulous writing duet by two very talented poets!!
Decaflame
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2 posted 05-29-2001 11:15 AM       View Profile for Decaflame   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Decaflame

Yes, I enjoyed this very much....
StarPhantasy
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3 posted 05-29-2001 12:11 PM       View Profile for StarPhantasy   Email StarPhantasy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for StarPhantasy

there is no other word to describe this, but simply breathtaking. This a great piece of work.

)*E*(
brian madden
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4 posted 05-29-2001 04:09 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

as each sound
EXPOUNDS
in drip
Chinese water tortureless
every day the same
inane

mundane
and weighted
to the ground
I drown

and within death
her surety
I find myself
sheer release
the glory I am after all
even in the guilt of fall


WOW Jaw dropping stuff here. you guys make an excellent team. your audience demands more poetry, even if you have to lose sleep writing it. nOt that will matter to night owl Seren.  


"you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see"  Whipping boy

Dark Angel
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5 posted 05-30-2001 05:53 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

ethome, Decaflame, StarPhantasy and Brian.....

Thank you so much for your  lovely replies, we do appreciate them so  
Thank you for stopping by and taking the time to read  
Glad you enjoyed.

Hey me Sista
It was a real pleasure writing with you hon, oh and trying to keep up with ya  

Thank you

Maree
JLR
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6 posted 05-30-2001 06:01 PM       View Profile for JLR   Email JLR   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JLR

and silence lies
from lines of times
of first words uttered...

Amazing duet here...enjoyed!
Martie
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7 posted 05-30-2001 10:06 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Bravo!!  Great writing you guys!
Poet deVine
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8 posted 05-31-2001 12:41 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Wow!!! This is fabulous!    
Saunni
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9 posted 05-31-2001 01:29 AM       View Profile for Saunni   Email Saunni   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saunni

This is simply wonderful! Truly is!  

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

Severn
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10 posted 05-31-2001 04:07 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Wow.

Flabbergasted.

You two ladies write fabulously well together.

Love you both

K

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 05-31-2001).]

Charisma
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11 posted 05-31-2001 04:12 AM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

fabulous written.....you two are a great combination.

enjoyed it a lot.

Charisma
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13 posted 05-22-2004 12:18 AM       View Profile for muted   Email muted   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for muted

oh...my...goodness...
now wont ya have a look at this...
so thats what sheer delight looks like?
serenity blaze
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14 posted 05-22-2004 02:48 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

thank you dix, for bringing this up...I'd forgotten how easily we sang together.



She's good...
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