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Temptress
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0 posted 2001-05-29 01:55 AM


There is a whisper makings its way here,
Sofly feather touching a windy moment,
And in my ear I hear the echo of your value.
There is a merriment in my heart,
To have the touch of your spirit,
Graze with wise fingers on my thoughts.
Softly say to me that I am not alone,
And I shall believe and trust,
As I feel the warmth of the fire you keep.
Gazing at your knowledge, I understand what you mean,
When you tell me that you have lived your words,
And that your dreams are mere instances,
Of a distant life of wisdom peppered,
With the age of experience and connection.
I offer a smile and you stand ready for it.
I offer a tear and your hands stray to my cheeks to catch them,
And as they pool in your warm hands,
I watch them evaporate, and I am comforted,
Once again by the blaze of friendship that you make constant.
Ever here, I feel you.
Ever soaking the moments of my weakness, I touch you.
Ever turning my face toward you,
As you are there at every turn,
To offer the kind kiss of gentle friendship.
And as you cup my face,
I relax and let myself into you as you within me,
Accepting, if only briefly until next time,
The sofly adamant insistence of your guidance.


still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer - All Rights Reserved
LittleCookie
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1 posted 2001-05-29 02:06 AM


This is beautiful, I have a friend who would like this very much.Thanks for sharing!
    LittleCookie~~

:*)Agile in love,while rooted in soul

anonymous albert ?
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2 posted 2001-05-29 03:03 AM


a nice beautiful write...i enjoyed this read...thanks for sharing it jenn...and hope to see more...

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

ethome
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3 posted 2001-05-29 05:34 AM


Beautiful tribute! Full of such open warm affectionate love.

These lines I love, great ending!!

                    "Accepting, if only briefly until next time,
                 The sofly adamant insistence of your guidance."

I like that...."softly adamant"

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2001-05-29 07:42 AM


TemptyOne~
Enjoyed this one very much.

'I offer a smile and you stand ready for it.'

*Sigh*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                               noles1@totcon.com             

Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 2001-05-29 07:47 AM


Temptress
I love your writing
This is wonderfully tender and soft
Intimate and gentle
Liz

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6 posted 2001-05-29 01:06 PM


Simply a beautiful write, and the sentiments within acknowledging a friendship between someone seasoned in wisdom and given to someone growing in innocence is very well done.  I really enjoyed this poem

~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~

Sven
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7 posted 2001-05-29 06:42 PM


wow. . . what depth here. . . you're getting better with each writing that I read. . .

well done. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Logan
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8 posted 2001-05-30 01:32 AM


To know these feelings, is to know truths. Beautiful beyond comprehension...gentle smile
Temptress
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9 posted 2001-05-30 02:09 AM


LittleCookie,
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed and think it worthy for your friend.

Albert,
Thank you for reading my work. I'm very glad you are enjoying it all.

ethome,
Finally, someone who shares the same taste in lines as I do.   I say this because its often the lines I think will be the least noticeable that get noticed. LOL! Is it wrong I wonder to have a favorite line about your own work? Anways..what I mean to say is that I hope you enjoyed that line as much as I enjoyed coming up with it.  

Marge,
To make anyone sigh with my work makes it a worthy effort. Thank you.  

Elizabeth,
You have graced me with an honor by reading my work, Lady.   Thank you for enjoying.

Mysteria,
It is indeed a beautiful and different kind of friendship. It is one I will treasure, and I'm very glad that you picked up on the theme well.  

Sven,
Thank you. Sometimes the words flow easily and sometimes I have to drive them out with the banging of fingers on a keyboard. Glad you enjoyed this.

Logan,
Your gentle smiles will be my undoing, for you are feeding my ego well, sir.   I appreciate it and your friendship, but I'm sure you already know that just by reading above.  


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