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redheart angrybraids
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since 2000-04-16

Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii

0 posted 2001-05-28 06:41 PM

Worn Out Robe
You,
whose eyes are broken
with dawn,
and leads the groans
of the suns yawn.
Your
words held tight to the threads
in my braid,
unweaving the night
and revealing the day.
At last the cycle is seen
again.
My friend, my dear one,
you who wishes
for fire and wind to
cease in heavenly bliss your desire.
Your thoughts are water and earth,
and with that
your sad times will never end.
No life or death is ours to grant.
The stories of the universe
will forever be met.
And my heart dreams out to you
with guardians from our animals, t
o see you fly on wings of light through the chaos
and into the night.
Our journey is a orphic one,
blessed with laughter and love.
The only wonder I wish for you is the marvel we all share
from the stars above.
We are always welcome
and have our lessons learned.
We will challenge our wicked ways,
though our time must be earned.

this is some thing i wrote along time ago to my dad, hehehehe
little dramatic wouldn't ya say, ahohohoahooha

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

1 posted 2001-05-28 06:42 PM

I loved this, I absolutely loved it!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

2 posted 2001-05-28 07:12 PM

                         Worn Out Robe
                         You,
                         whose eyes are broken
                         with dawn,
                         and leads the groans
                         of the suns yawn.
                         Your
                         words held tight to the threads
                         in my braid,
                         unweaving the night
                         and revealing the day.
                         At last the cycle is seen
                         again.

Absolutely a stunning write, redheart.
The imagery is amazing.
I need to read more from you, so pleaseeeeeee keep writing

Love which is not always springing is always dying.

Kahlil Gibran

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2001-05-28 07:50 PM

LittleRedHeartAngryBraids~
Your caressing thoughts hold me mesmerized.
I'm so glad you have returned to share your words with us.

'Your
words held tight to the threads
in my braid,
unweaving the night
and revealing the day.'

WONDERFUL !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

theLadypoet
Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 97
Or USA

4 posted 2001-05-28 08:01 PM

Darling redheart...poetry is about feeling
and sensing and sharing. The techie stuff
you mention can be learned or fixed, but
the absolute aura of you personally...this
is a gift.

theLadypoet

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

5 posted 2001-06-06 11:20 PM

redheart, yet another one for me to keep and savour and ponder...

i love your writing..they are packed full with awesome images and i am left wondering half the time wondering what am i supposed to get out of your writing...LOL..

Logan
Senior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

6 posted 2001-06-06 11:45 PM

For your Dad? What a wonderful gift he received in you...gentle smile

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2001-06-07 12:58 PM

After reading that it was for your dad, it opened up the meaning of the piece, for me, 10 fold. It is beautiful, he must have been proud and wonderfully touched.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

8 posted 2001-06-07 03:59 PM

I love when I find one from you here....this is excellent, simply stunning work....

Lauren~

***

Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."

Tovi
Member

since 2001-06-05

Posts 168

9 posted 2001-06-07 04:01 PM

You place words together beautifully, creating magic. I loved it.

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2001-06-07 05:53 PM

So unusual the way you weave your feelings into words...wonderful poetry!

redheart angrybraids
Member

since 2000-04-16

Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii

11 posted 2001-06-25 04:33 AM

thank you all, i wasn't sure how this one was going to turn over to others,
but all the come back was so positive, thank you all so much,
it was one of the longer poems i've writen, i'm rather embarrased with the simple words i know, but i suppose if i new larger words my thoughts could be unreadable. i'm such a drama queen. hhehehhe

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

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