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redheart angrybraids
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0 posted 2001-05-28 02:53 AM


i just walk, transparent
into the foggy blue,
with a prayer of contentment and healing,

my, my....,
how time goes by,
and i haven't felt a word,

like finger
wearing the clumsy thimble,
i keep feeling the needle
try with force
to come in blood deep,
but i remember that if
i learn to use my thimble
with trust in its protection, i will
finally get my life quilt, pieced together.


i know this to is kinda cheesy and stuff pretty wordy, i'm open to criticism,
kinldy redheart

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

[This message has been edited by redheart angrybraids (edited 05-28-2001).]

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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2001-05-28 03:02 AM


CHEESE? only with finest wine m'luv! This is incredibly lovely...my I love the play of thought in your mind...like silkworms spinning...you, my dear friend, are a remarkable poet!
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2 posted 2001-05-28 10:43 AM


RedHeartAngryBraids~

'my, my....,
how time goes by,
and i haven't felt a word'


Well ... you have made ME feel your words, sweet little poet !

This is just magnificient emotion ... at it's finest.

I collect thimbles and you have certainly given me a new perspective on them.  I'm printing this little jewel out to place in one of my thimble cases.
Love n' hugs~
~*Marge*~

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Victoria
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3 posted 2001-05-28 11:21 AM


lovely poem..enjoyed very much

                ~Victoria~


Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up.

Pablo Picasso


redheart angrybraids
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4 posted 2001-05-28 12:07 PM


thankyou all so much, just like a breath of fresh air you all make be feel so good,
i will read and comment when i return from work,

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids


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5 posted 2001-05-28 01:02 PM


Redheart Angrybreads..i think it is very very good,i will go read more of yours now  
SpitFire
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6 posted 2001-05-28 02:21 PM


~RedHeart,...the title itself is pure poetry. That line can take me soaring. This piece is inside somehow and stirring softly. Thank you for sharing it and you. *Peace.
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7 posted 2001-05-28 04:05 PM


poetic indeed....I felt the words line by line....thanks..


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VAS
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8 posted 2001-05-30 10:43 AM


Didn't see anything cheesy here.  This is the first of yours I've read and I look forward to more.  I enjoyed the style.
Sudhir Iyer
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9 posted 2001-05-30 10:57 AM


This is excellent work,

My regards,
Sudhir

Irish Rose
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10 posted 2001-05-30 11:25 AM


great metaphor, cheese with a fine wine I would say!  Well done!

Kathleen Blake

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and the sun drips honey."
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11 posted 2001-06-06 11:07 PM


cheesy???gosh i aspire to write like you some day...i love the way your wacky mind works and hope that i may write, letting my mind's thoughts go unrestrained...

this is a keeper...

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