navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #14 » First Post - "Perfect Imperfection" - Insignificant Love
Open Poetry #14
Post A Reply Post New Topic First Post - "Perfect Imperfection" - Insignificant Love Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Requiem
New Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 7


0 posted 2001-05-28 12:19 PM


Written when I was fifteen, my first serious poem. Though in retrospect what I was going through seems absolutely inane, it was what I was going through, so I feel I should do it justice by expressing it. This, as said in the topic, is my first time posting. Yo.


I hate them for being perfect
We're so imperfect, just how I like it
I'm so deep you make me shallow
You're so shallow you make me deep
Too many chinks in the armour
Speak from the heart, spit out bull(censored)
Shivers of opening myself
Just so I can close the door
Is this real or just dramatic entertainment?
Goodbye my perfect imperfection
Call me

© Copyright 2001 Requiem - All Rights Reserved
pamela08
Junior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 27
California,USA
1 posted 2001-05-28 12:44 PM


great poem i liked it a lot...welcome to passions

true beauty comes from within not from without

latin passion
Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576

2 posted 2001-05-28 12:56 PM


Good intro, enjoyed the read.

My faith is but the size my mustard seed. I'll turn the other cheek in my love for mankind - not pride.

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
3 posted 2001-05-28 07:31 AM


Had you not written this then, would you have remembered your feelings, now? Welcome to Passions!  Check your e-mail for a special message!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Watersign6
Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823
Hurricane,WV
4 posted 2001-05-28 08:23 AM


very good intro,like it  
Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
5 posted 2001-05-28 05:14 PM


Welcome to Passions!   This is a wonderful start!  

Sven
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
6 posted 2001-05-29 06:58 PM


call you a member of Passions?  Sure thing. . .

this is great. . . what a way to look at it at that age. . .

welcome. . .  

-----------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
7 posted 2001-05-29 07:55 PM


Welcome to the family. We are never brutal about anything around here. We give you our honest feelings though. I liked your poem and I hope you join in all the fun around here. I look forward to reading more from you!  
Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
8 posted 2001-05-29 08:22 PM


I think this one says a lot.  Very nice write.  Welcome to Passions!!  

I love your name by the way!!  

LW

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
9 posted 2001-05-30 03:13 PM


Its great to be able to look back and see how far we have come...welcome to our world
Corinne
Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
10 posted 2001-05-30 04:18 PM


Very well done! You are a natural at this, keep posting.

Corinne

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #14 » First Post - "Perfect Imperfection" - Insignificant Love

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary