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I Am But A Paper Doll (revamped/repost)
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I Am But A Paper Doll (revamped/repost) |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California 
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I Am But A Paper Doll Fashioned out of just paper Someone you can dress to fit You’re every mood This is how you see me No value I am to you If not to your liking then with A flamboyant jolt you undress My attire to fit What ever you desire On my better dressed days You find it most amusing To strip away my feelings Just because you can! Fashioned out of just paper Something of not much value Is how you perceive me Making sure I know just Were you stand Flesh and blood means nothing Even though you made public Your vows to treasure me No matter which way we were to land Now I wait for that moment in time To dress with vim and vigor And paste you to the wall With no more than cheap glue In my hands! How could you possibly ever think That this flimsy paper doll You dress to fit your every mood Would ever have the stamina To walk all over you! By, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) [This message has been edited by Cerenity (edited 05-27-2001).] |
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LAA Junior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 11 |
A stern, yet sorrowed spirit bounds from each line, nicely done. LAA |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Very, very clever and powerfully expressed, excellent use of a theme to convey possibly a few situations in life!  My library must have this~ *Hun, you misspelled "cheep" it should be cheap* Take care, Melissa~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Flesh and blood means nothing Even though you made public Your vows to treasure me No matter which way we were to land Cerenity, powerful writing, it hits hard. also great to finally see you as well. "you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see" Whipping boy |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
what a great metaphor, I personally don't capitalize every line but maybe that's just a personal thing...loved the metaphor [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 05-27-2001).] |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Everyone, Thank you so much for your kind replys and also help with spelling and such, and Brian my friend it's kind of strange seeing myself up there but I like to see who I'm talking to, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) [This message has been edited by Cerenity (edited 05-28-2001).] |
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pamela08 Junior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 27California,USA |
great use of metaphor....such a strong poem....your writting is fascinating....i look foward to more of your poetry true beauty comes from within not from without |
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