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first night |
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azure Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 52 |
I lie beside your pale still limbs sounds of the city night (passing cars a blues band in the bar next door) drift in your open window twisting the restless sheet you hung there before you met me. I can't sleep - I watch you silently wanting to pull you from your warm bed, drive you to the lake and talk until dawn, shivering on dewy picnic tables, but you're already talking in your sleep Instead I'll watch you resting soundlessly, and when you reach for me in your dream, I'll realize I am already in love and oh, this is dangerous. |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
I like this you really pull your reader into it. Good writing. |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
What a wild dream, I enjoyed the read. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Very nice, like it. Titia |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
and OHHHH.... this is wonderful *s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I am already in love and oh, this is dangerous. Dangerous and wonderous Love is all these things. Really enjoyed the poem.  "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
Woohooo! loved your poem |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is a great poem and you're right love is tricky stuff! |
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