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whose shame ? |
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helen smith Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 240 |
1x2=2 2x2=4 3x2=6 Standard smile in a standard fix Tiny fingers soothe sad bruised skin sad soft eyees are sunken in, Forbidding the truth to escape. 123 who will sit with me when school begins? Uniform the same but never can With uncool tags And a hem that sags. An uncool smell and they all know... Wonder if the bruises show. Tiny fingers hopelessly smooth Cumpled cloth... Ironing out the memories of the night . Who'll sit with me and use my name Uncut lunch nearly looks the same . 4x2=8 Mustn't be home late, Mum needs me to witness her shame . Out the gate .First . first time today. Whatever did the teacher say ? Wonder if dad's got his pay. Tiny fingers soothe tired bruised skin. Can that be him ?a- comin' in ? |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Oh dear, first day school. It's been a while, they're grown up now, but I still remember. Nice poem Titia |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Ouch ... This is on a very hard subject, this poem made me cry . If it is written about you or anyone that you know, then I am very sorry and hope that things sort themselves out, if it is written from an outsiders perspective, then you have got a very hard subject down to a t . Take care, thanks . L.of.L. Tommy . XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX 'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
a powerful poem, I hope that this is not written from personal experience if so then I am truely sorry that you had to go through that. "across the unfair divide |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
a very very powerful poem you capture it well only hope it is a observation an not something you have gone through personally it is one that can move me to tears just thinkin about it. |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
How children learn . A rough life when love is far away. |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Excellent job...helen I love you XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX I will sit with you and take your name ...LOLO Very nice, I too still remember my first day of school and use to remember it bcz it is the day of my life when I took a step into the real world. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I hurt while reading this. You have conveyed a deep meaning here and I, too, hope it is fiction. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
what a very powerful way to get the message across...this is poetry. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Helen~ Being one of many who work with children ... I so sadly identified with this delicate piece~ Too many times Too many faces Covered in tears and bruises in places that perhaps we cannot see unless we try harder to look beyond the 'almost-smiles' the 'almost-tears' and find the child hidden so deep in the fears Bless you for sharing this poignant piece ! I've shared it with the other mentors in my groups, who also found it tearfully touching. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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helen smith Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 240 |
thank you all for your compassion I have not revisited this poem for some time and I cried a little too |
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Qumar Fatthi Member
since 2001-05-20
Posts 59Pakistan |
sorry............ i can't understand what u want to say.. plz help me i want to ......... the poet is Helen smith i think it will good poem....... |
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