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Off The Trail Of Painted Ponies
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Off The Trail Of Painted Ponies |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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On a cool night in October, when the night worms weave and crawl I was dealing with my anger, I was hiding from my faults. And my soul was running rancid, feeling kind of bleak, So I looked out through my window, past the day lacking peace, and I fell into a liquidness and nursed my inner child I was searching for some righteousness, I'd been searching for awhile. Then I heard a song Arapahoe, an Indian through my glass The story of a gallant chief whose days were long since past. His words were growing louder now, my eyes began to stray. My muse was breathing harder now, as the daylight flew away A troop hard riding, bluecoat boys, came in upon the scene Their Captain calling orders fast, with dust clouds billowing. Then I stroked my whiskered chin a bit, and drank in the sky's ink When you're out there in that wonder, you just can't refuse to think. I was floating through a timeless glass, up to the king of hearts I was getting close to reasons begged, somewhere inside the stars. And then a smiling maiden's eyes would lead me to the source She laughed lightly on my ears part of his music score. There I felt the wealth of nature, I soared outside of me I was heading to that distant land, within my summary peace. Well the warrior chief sang his song, "You'll find peace a ways behind me, Better listen to these tales I quote, and I'll tell what is free No use hoping for a future, if there's no looking back, Cause you know you're going nowhere, and how long can that last? You're off the trail of painted ponies and you can't see the spots and you're heading into danger learning greed is always loss." Then I got feeling so empty, when the Captain killed this chief And I cried removed from yesterday, but still searching for that peace Off the trail of painted ponies where I can't see the spots On the last road with my fellow man and I was feeling lost. The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Ethome, for silencing me this day.... a keeper, this.... I will try to find my voice again to come back and tell you just how this scarred my soul.... |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
I think this is a beautifull poem. Titia |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Ethome, amazing write... had me reveted to the screen. More layers then I can grasp in one read... must read again.  Parker |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Yes this definitely deserves more than one read...so into my ethome file it goes...I print yours out ya know....so I can read them whenever I want |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Then I stroked my whiskered chin a bit, and drank in the sky's ink When you're out there in that wonder, you just can't refuse to think. I was floating through a timeless glass, up to the king of hearts I was getting close to reasons begged, somewhere inside the stars. And then a smiling maiden's eyes would lead me to the source She laughed lightly on my ears part of his music score. There I felt the wealth of nature, I soared outside of me I was heading to that distant land, within my summary peace. Well the warrior chief sang his song, "You'll find peace a ways behind me, Better listen to these tales I quote, and I'll tell what is free No use hoping for a future, if there's no looking back, Cause you know you're going nowhere, and how long can that last? You're off the trail of painted ponies and you can't see the spots and you're heading into danger learning greed is always loss." ======================== And I cried removed from yesterday, but still searching for that peace On the last road with my fellow man and I was feeling lost. ========================== this is amazing and gave me a chill of both awe and emotion. Eric, this is a most impresive level of inspire and also shows your diversity as a writer, and the depth of your soul. I will be sharing this gift of your muse with Mark tonite, as he is on a vision quest of his own and I know he will feel a kinship to this piece. Outstanding writing E-babes...so cool, you are  We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
E-babes ... just read this to Mark ... he absolutely loved this and asks me to print it out so that he can have a copy to read when ever he wants... he said very very cool write ET We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ I can trust that you would know this would touch my spirit ~ 'No use hoping for a future, if there's no looking back' 'And I cried removed from yesterday, but still searching for that peace' In questing visions ~ we see the past, because it was ~ and view the future ~ for the peace that is to be ~ Thank you for sharing this. In peaceful questing always ~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Excellent story. There is definitely a lot to ponder here. Thanks for the read. Melton |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent writing Ethome! You captured so much within these lines ... it kept me spellbound, beautifully written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Hope Rises New Member
since 2001-05-26
Posts 6In the land of Dreams second cloud on the right |
ET, absolutely perfect you have held me totally spellbound. An excellent peice of writing but more than that it is reflected inward, I truly think this is terrific love, outstanding writing and I love it Take care Hope  I have spread my dreams under your feet |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, You sly dog, you caught me with this one. An excellent write and I realy enjoyed it. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ethome--My friend, this is an amazing write...thank you for it. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
There is no other word to describe this piece, except "perfection". Thank you for sharing your wonderful talent with me. ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
BRAVO!!!CLAPPING!!!I love this one, sweet friend. Your music always fills me with joy. I so love reading your work, my friend. {{{BIG HUGS}}} Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sunshine I hope I didn't silence you for very long as I always look forward to hearing from you. Thanks for the comments. Thank you Titia for the nice comment. Thanks Parker for the layer comment. I appreciate you dropping in. Paula my dear poet pal it's always good to hear from you and I hope to read some of your work soon........love to ya! Janet my dear poet pet it's always good to be able to give you a little chill with words because you can do the same to me so easily! Thanks for the wonderful comments. JM I'm glad Mark liked this and please tell him I said hello. Oh yeah Marge I knew you'd be able to relate to this one. Thanks so much for your kind words and keep the faith dear lady! Thank you Melton for the ponder word and I'm glad you took the time to read this. Thanks Kit for the thoughts I love to hear from a fellow Canuck keep up the good work! Thank you Hope for the comment and the encouraging words I truly appreciate them! Seymour thanks...I wasn't trying to be that sly and I'm sure glad you had the time to read this. Martie my dear flower girl I always love to hear from you and thanks for the encouragement. Mysteria I want to thank you for that perfection word I really appreciate the thought. Thank you so much for the hugs and love Startime I always love to hear from you. The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
ethome,this is just incredible,a thrilling read for me an so well written i had to read it twice as i love it so |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Watersign6 for your kind comments I appreciate them so much! |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
My g-d! I've been captured by the perfectly spun tale. Riveting write. Exquisite. i think I liked it! lol "I am not now that which I have been." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Julian I appreciate your time taken to read this piece and the encouraging comments. The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A huge thumbs up sign centred across on a 50 foot banner with a background that says "WOW, THIS IS INCREDIBLE", especially for you, my friend, ethome... Regards, Sudhir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ah Sudhir my dear poet friend, you are so very kind, thank you for taking the time to read this, I really appreciate your input........have a nice day.....ethome The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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