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1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2001-05-25 01:46 AM

Echo of Sadness

oh, shadow
at night
I hear you moan
it is the sound
of suffering
how I know that song
it is a yearning
for a countenance
like one you’ve
never known
yet
if you utter a sound of it
your dreams will be
gone
miles away from you
I still taste
your salt
and in every
similarity and difference
I have
thought that thought
your dreams go
unfulfilled
the pillow of
discontent
others do not hear
you moan
but I know the tune
of lament
yes, I know
how you suffer
the starving
of a heart
it is the loneliest
place on earth
where
body and soul depart
in the roaring
echo of sadness
I see pure light
and in your darkness
dreaming
I still guard
your night

"...the rest is silence" (Hamlet) Shakespeare

latin passion
Senior Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 576

1 posted 2001-05-25 02:20 AM

what a calming and compassionate poem, ahh..now I going to sleep. good read.

let our hands communicate what's in our heart. A Wisp of a brush...

g-hm
Member

since 2001-05-16

Posts 85

2 posted 2001-05-25 08:21 AM

I know the moans, hold on to the dreams.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

3 posted 2001-05-25 10:36 AM

enjoy

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

4 posted 2001-05-25 11:40 AM

You know, I don't normally like non-rhyming poems, but yours always sound good to me as I read them. I do like them.

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

5 posted 2001-05-25 11:48 AM

yes, sadness is often difficult to write about, Helen, but you do it so well.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Cerenity
Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

6 posted 2001-05-25 02:11 PM

Hi Slick Lady,

This is done so very well, and the flow was perfect, very much enjoyed,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

Watersign6
Senior Member

since 2001-05-25

Posts 823
Hurricane,WV

7 posted 2001-05-25 02:36 PM

i truely enjoyed this poem,very well done
an i am going to read more of yours soon.
this one flows so well.

Rain
Junior Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 21
Atlanta, GA

8 posted 2001-05-25 03:20 PM

This is beautiful. Especially the ending.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2001-05-27 09:43 PM

wow. . . this doesn't seem so much like an echo of sadness as it does an echo of the heart. . .

excellent helen. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

10 posted 2001-05-27 11:03 PM

My new 1slick_fav!

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

11 posted 2001-05-28 02:28 AM

Oh, very very nice

Maree

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

12 posted 2001-05-28 03:15 AM

You write so beautifully that most of the time I'm at a loss for words. I enjoyed this.

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

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