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Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

0 posted 2001-05-24 04:44 PM

in his lullabye
he swings me soft, eye to eye
cradling my moods

in his wistful sigh
he plucks all heartstrings of note
he knows me by rote

what then can I give
for his heart is why I live
in his lullabye

write with grace, all others lose face;
"Jo was very tall, thin, ... and reminded one of a colt..." LMA

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

1 posted 2001-05-24 04:55 PM

beautiful writing.

"across the unfair divide
where black will never meet white
so read my token lips
as though they never exist"

nicky wire

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

2 posted 2001-05-24 06:08 PM

Lovely trio of senryu. Well done!

PM

Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

3 posted 2001-05-24 06:23 PM

That one is very, very nice

Titia

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

4 posted 2001-05-24 07:02 PM

Lady In White,

This is such a lovely piece. Thank you for sharing.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2001-05-24 07:06 PM

LadyInWhite~
Adoringly penned.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2001-05-24 09:13 PM

It sang like a lullabye too, I so enjoyed this one.

~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~
Homepage: http://www.mysteria-poetry.cityslide.com/contents/contents.cfm/451673

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2001-05-24 09:17 PM

oh, to live as a lullabye in someone's heart, that is a peaceful relationship

some may say using 'heartstrings' is cliché
but I enjoyed it anyway

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

8 posted 2001-05-24 10:24 PM

it is...very peaceful

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

9 posted 2001-05-25 11:41 AM

Thank you all so very much for reading, and leaving your comments. It is not easy, always, to put across a peaceful feeling, but apparently, this one might have succeeded.

Thank you again!

BrightStar
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since 2001-04-08

Posts 219

10 posted 2001-05-27 07:02 PM

Soothing and beautiful.

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

11 posted 2001-05-27 07:10 PM

Oh, wow, these are beautiful and so peaceful!

Take care,
Melissa

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