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Riding The Wind-----Unplugged with Serenity
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Riding The Wind-----Unplugged with Serenity |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Riding the wind of an echo Voices propelling my back The loss of the thought to be let go The echoes now taunting my back. Flying a dream to nowhere Nowhere I'd rather be Than lost in your peppermint kisses Kisses in grip of ME. Drowning in hottest desire To think I will see you again Memories just waiting to happen Touching myself in pretend. Dancing on sweat dampened pillows Wrestling within tangled sheets Lost in the feverish pleasure And found in your eyes rising sweet. Searching for tender releases Searching your eyes for a sigh Finding all that I dreamt of Rebuking fears that all is LIE. [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 05-25-2001).] |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Bravo!...a good flowing piece. Enjoyed the read. Poeminister [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 05-24-2001).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wow. . . this is definitely "in the wind". . . excellent by both of you. . .  -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
if I am reading the title right then this is a duet with Sen. if not I quickly reach for the dunce cap. anyway whether penned solo or with accompaniment this is a beautiful poem. well penned Paula. "you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see" Whipping boy |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Poeminister...its serenity who deserves all the credit for this one...thank you Sven...thanks...serenity is a joy to write with.... Brian...yes its a duet...the unplugged is an inside joke...lol hey Bri go to the santuary and dare her to tell you what it is hehehe...and thanks I always enjoy when you visit one of my poems |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well now isn't this a passionate little number you and Celeste have written! I get quite the barrage of ideas when I read these lines.. "Dancing on sweat dampened pillows Wrestling within tangled sheets Lost in the feverish pleasure And found in your eyes rising sweet." I don't know what you two are cooking up but I think I like it! I really loved the whole piece! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
lovely duet....love the lines. excellent work by both of you. Charisma |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Drowning in hottest desire To think I will see you again Memories just waiting to happen Touching myself in pretend. Dancing on sweat dampened pillows Wrestling within tangled sheets Lost in the feverish pleasure And found in your eyes rising sweet. ============================ Have to agree with E-babes..this is nicey and spicey... and the cajun cadencec was great read aloud... and that last line ... stings and zings. Well done poetesses Finn & Sen  I'm hanging on your every word |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you Paula, it was much fun as always...and thanks to all for reading...and um, Paula? I will not be taking that dare should it occur and YOU KNOW IT...  besides, I've still got a date with a marshmallow!  Thanks all! |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
what a outstanding duet by you both,sweet,hot an a wonderful read,thanks |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I love it. Soft, tender and very very sensual. BRAVO!!!CLAPPING WITH DELIGHT!!Oh yes I love this one. All my favorite ingredients. {{{BIG HUGS}}}Much love to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
ethome...well mmm I was thinking about a trip...hehehe...thank you sweetest poet man  times a jillionCharisma...serenity is a joy to write with...thank you Janet Marie...you know her...she just brings out the very best in me when we write together serenity...LOL coward...  thank you darlin...you are inspiring as alwaysWatersign6...you are too kind...thank you Startime...  awwww you are sweet to say so thank you |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I must say the visions this conjures are amazing. You certainly succeeded there!!! I just wonder if ethome and I are seeing things...the same. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
very good Paula. You reach out so well and create imagery with your words....gentle smile |
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