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RMW
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0 posted 2001-05-24 10:01 AM


Feminine

It
Felt feminine.
Strange,
Given my situation,
Alone at the bottom of a canyon
Where heat vied with glacier water
Craving a union
Where the insulated thighs of my hip boots
Gave way to the frozen white
Of jeans cut-off.
Not to mention
My baseball cap,
Reversed to guard against the sun,
Or the ultimate masculine,
A Bowie knife
As protection against who knows what
In the way of wild abandon.
And yet,
I observed the slow unbuttoning
Of my flannel shirt,
As though it were something
A wife should do
On occasion.

RMW

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Lady In White
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1 posted 2001-05-24 10:02 AM


Not only was that extremely feminine, but slightly warming, as well....

an excellent write, but then I've come to expect no less.....

RMW
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2 posted 2001-05-24 10:08 AM


Lady in White ..... Thank you. What a pleasant way to begin the morning...reading your kind words. Again, thank you.  Bob
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3 posted 2001-05-24 10:16 AM


wow, this is great......what a picture you paint...
Titia Geertman
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4 posted 2001-05-24 10:24 AM


And no one there to share.....

Very nice by the way, loved it.

Titia

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5 posted 2001-05-24 12:07 PM


Bob--You have so delicately and deliberately inserted a sensuality into the imagery here..very well done!
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6 posted 2001-05-24 02:19 PM


A lovely balance of yin and yang, Bob. Loved the visuals you presented here, too.

Cor

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7 posted 2001-05-25 12:45 PM


Oh my...and cant you just feel those feminine fingers tugging on that flannel shirt?
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8 posted 2001-05-25 06:30 AM


Great atmosphere in this write!  Love the twist of the reasoning. You are a true poet!
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9 posted 2001-05-25 07:32 PM


RMW~
Understanding this one completely ...
Very nicely portrayed.
~*Marge*~

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10 posted 2001-05-25 09:02 PM


I hate when that happens Bob. . .

what a unique view of the world you have. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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11 posted 2001-05-26 07:45 AM


LOVE THIS...

my kind of poetry I think...

K

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12 posted 2001-05-26 07:47 AM


RMW...make Severn share....this is Everyone's kind of poetry!
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13 posted 2001-05-26 07:50 AM


i just loved your poem,what a great writer you are an i will look for more of yours.

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14 posted 2001-06-03 04:29 PM


I observed the slow unbuttoning
Of my flannel shirt,
As though it were something
A wife should do
On occasion.


A very interesting scene, simple task turned into a profound observation. Loved it.    

"difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true
Brutal and mocking but always therea crutch for enmity's saddest glare"

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15 posted 2001-06-04 09:28 AM


Bob, you have done it again.  I would be green with envy if not for the fact that I enjoy you work so much.
WRITE ON!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth


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16 posted 2001-06-13 02:33 PM


In each poem I read,
I find something new
and something to ponder

I do enjoy your style RMW

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