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Dancing In The Rain

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Paula Finn
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0 posted 05-24-2001 01:34 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Paula Finn

Sitting at the river
   watching the rain
      echo off the surface
         of the water.
            Not really thinking
               about anything
                  Its one of those
                     moments of solitude
                        Where everything else
                           is gone
                              and its just you.

Its a soft rain
   the kind that
      tempts you to dance
         So I do
            Standing knee deep
               in the cool running water
                  hands uplifted to the rain
                     hips swaying to the
                        music of the river  
                           In almost primal need
                               to feel the water.

Unthinking my hands
   tug away my shirt
      Stripping the world
         away
            Reveling in the
               freedom
                  The rain comes
                     harder
                        Making my skin
                           tingle
                              Then comes the sun.
                  
          
  


                          

      
    


                              
                              
          
                        
                  
      

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Rain
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1 posted 05-24-2001 01:36 AM       View Profile for Rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rain

A well captured moment.  I loved the set up of this.  Compliments it nicely!
Snowdwen
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2 posted 05-24-2001 01:48 AM       View Profile for Snowdwen   Email Snowdwen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Snowdwen

Nicely done.. it makes me want to go outside and play in the rain.
I think my fav. part was..

"Unthinking my hands
   tug away my shirt
      Stripping the world
         away
            Reveling in the
               freedom"

Nicely said and well done! great peace..
Can't wate to read more!
                  

"You live you learn and life moves on"


Packratmike
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3 posted 05-24-2001 02:31 AM       View Profile for Packratmike   Email Packratmike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Packratmike

Very good, Paula.....this reminds me of a little flower-child I once knew.*sigh*

Mike
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4 posted 05-24-2001 02:52 AM       View Profile for Poeminister   Email Poeminister   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poeminister's Home Page   View IP for Poeminister


I love these kind of moments and love the way you've written about this one.  Nicely done.

Poeminister
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5 posted 05-24-2001 03:24 AM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

Ohh...I love this.I do..simply that, and I can say no more.  

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

ethome
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6 posted 05-24-2001 06:15 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

I really love this verse!

"Its a soft rain
                   the kind that
                      tempts you to dance
                         So I do
                            Standing knee deep
                               in the cool running water
                                  hands uplifted to the rain
                                     hips swaying to the
                                        music of the river  
                                           In almost primal need
                                               to feel the water."

Excellent work Paula!
JamesMichael
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7 posted 05-24-2001 06:24 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I would have liked to have seen this one Paula....James
Marge Tindal
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8 posted 05-24-2001 06:57 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Paula~
This is MARVELOUS !

The words gently cascade down the page.
Beautiful thoughts ~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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JLR
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9 posted 05-24-2001 08:55 AM       View Profile for JLR   Email JLR   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JLR

Dance and be free...loved the format!
vandana
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10 posted 05-24-2001 11:55 AM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

enjoy
forevernbluejeans
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11 posted 05-26-2001 02:57 PM       View Profile for forevernbluejeans   Email forevernbluejeans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for forevernbluejeans

Oh yes I felt every drop...
Marsha
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12 posted 05-26-2001 03:21 PM       View Profile for Marsha   Email Marsha   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marsha's Home Page   View IP for Marsha

Paula sister of my heart, utterly truly outstanding love. You have really written a special gem here. I adore it you have such a wondrous talent love, beautifully done. Every single word is a sparkling jewel.
Take care love as always
                  Mushy
                    

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning


Paula Finn
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13 posted 05-27-2001 02:03 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

Rain...I'm glad you enjoyed the dance...thank you

Snowden...thank you sweetie...you are sweet to say so

Mike...lol you sure it wasnt me?

Poeminister...they dont happen often enough do they?

Temptress...LOL you said enough thank you

ethome...somehow I just knew you would like that sweet poet man...thank you

James...I will dance for you anytime you know that

Marge...its just the rain...makes me wanna dance every time...thanks

JLR...you dance too ok?

vandana...thanks

forevernbluejeans...good

Marsha...girl you do go on...Im so spoiled with your praise...thank you
Siofra
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State of Suspended Passion


14 posted 05-27-2001 02:58 AM       View Profile for Siofra   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Siofra

the beauty of the rain and dancing..
You capture this nicely.
enjoyed.

I am many.

passing shadows
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15 posted 05-21-2004 01:10 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

wonderful!
 
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