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What Voice Beguiles? (a sonnet)
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What Voice Beguiles? (a sonnet) |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
What Voice Beguiles? (a sonnet) What voice has come to raise my dreary mood? So young of years but sweet with daring guile; That curve of mouth so close it pouts of brood This waif dares tease, to tease the dare, with smiles. Can she not see these years that wear with haste? This breath I take is rasp with times cruel care; Does wisdom gain where strong once held high rate? Or cruel is life to joke with voice so fair! The air is sweet with tastes of lilac scents, These knees may fail with just her whispered word; Oh my, the breath that raises bosoms vest, I'm caught as eyes do smile so sly, her nerve; Oh death delay beyond the coming morn, Tonight a song I'll sing, of love re-born. James Parker Haley (c) May 23, 2001 [This message has been edited by Parker (edited 05-24-2001).] |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Apparently, hers, then yours....and the circle completes.... and this is very, very good.... [This message has been edited by Decaflame (edited 05-23-2001).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Parker~ Hey handsome.....  this is wonderful |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
This breath I take is rasp with times cruel care; Does wisdom gain where strong once held high rate? Or cruel is life to joke with voice so fair! The air is sweet with tastes of lilac scents, These knees may fail with just her whispered word; Oh my, the breath that raises bosoms press, I'm caught as eyes do smile so sly, her nerve; Oh death delay beyond the coming morn, Tonight a song I'll sing, of love re-born. ================================ weak knees and heavy breathing bosoms???... are ya trying to cause a swoon riot LOL (hey....you started it)  SERIOUSLY tho... this is excellent P-man... you know I love your sonnets and this one is one of your best.. very cool vocab and phrasing... the delivery of the conflict aches in its empassioned express as does the resolve of the closing couplet the cadence and meter sings "sonnet me" ..pedestal me *L* very very cool write... one of these days Im gonna get sonnetized We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
wonderful sonnet! Kathleen Blake |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Decaflame, thank you very much. SEA, thank you sweety. Janet, thank you... maybe I could come over and sonnet you all nite long. Kathleen, thank you. Parker |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Ah fair knight, this maiden has missed your sonnets. I hope this poem speaks of story true and that your life blossoms of love |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Fair maid, I will them whisper them to thee on one knee. Parker |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
It sounds like love (or is it lust?), Park. Now, just HOW young is she? *G* Cor |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, my guess would be lust... I was out the other night with friends and observed these two of very different age and the looks were not dad and daughter. But you never know where love will come in and isn't age just a relative term. Parker |
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Secret Whisper Member
since 2001-01-25
Posts 298Through the Looking Glass |
Lovely. Truly lovely. "What I was living, the same am I now, dead." --Capaneus, THE INFERNO |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Secret, thank you kindly. Parker |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
wow! very cool sonnet, love i like! and, yeah..what about age...who gives a flip about age!  hugs, g the boy said, my name's johnny |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Parker, one for my library I do believe! Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well written Parker! I like these lines...... "Does wisdom gain where strong once held high rate? Or cruel is life to joke with voice so fair! but I really liked all the rest of it also! Tough assignment but you conquered it well! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I find sonnets so difficult Parker, and you've mastered them so beautifully ... excellent phrasing and theme, very much enjoyed this lovely piece! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
dg, so your saying its ok for me to date 19 year olds... Dee, thank you. ethome, thanks again good poet. Kit, I wished I could believe your words, but alot of possible sonnets have bit the dust in my writes. If they come out half right I'm happy.... glad you enjoyed. Parker |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I remember reading this one when you first posted it and I thought to myself I'll wait and post in a bit. Ok...well maybe a bit turned to several days.  But that doesn't mean I like it any less!  Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
APPLAUSE HERE! Well deserved LIz |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Marina, Liz thank your very kindly. Parker |
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