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The Storm

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Rain
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since 05-23-2001
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Atlanta, GA


0 posted 05-23-2001 10:23 AM       View Profile for Rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rain

"Now", whispers the storm
and it lashes violently
Thunder applauding it's arrival
The skies lit, to make sure I see each limb
torn and thrown
The flowers too fragile to withstand
by morning will be laying on the ground
Lost to me

I sit unaffected
as the lights flicker and die
The morning after will come
It always does
Damages to be assessed or just
ignored
Accepted as redecoration for
my life
viewed from these very
jaded eyes
© Copyright 2001 Beth Brianwood - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


1 posted 05-23-2001 10:41 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

The morning after will always come....

well done, and Welcome to Passions!  You and I have a lot in common, these midwestern storms!

Please check your e-mail for a special message....

and get comfortable...we're going to like you here!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



suthern
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on the threshold of a dream


2 posted 05-23-2001 10:58 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I love this... from the whispered "Now" to the wait... Perhaps such apathy comes only to those who've suffered too many of life's storms... what good does caring do when it doesn't change anything?

Welcome to Passions! I look forward to reading more of your work!
Sudhir Iyer
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since 04-26-2000
Posts 7206
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium


3 posted 05-23-2001 10:59 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

This is a fantastic start from you here in our family of friends...

WELCOME TO PASSIONS  

Regards,
Sudhir
Irie
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since 12-01-1999
Posts 1526
Washington State


4 posted 05-23-2001 11:08 AM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

A metaphoric, powerful piece.
The first few lines grabbed me, got my attention.
quote:
Now, whispers the storm
and it lashes violently
Thunder applauding it's arrival

Put me right there in the storm, of life!

Welcome to PIP Rain, I look forward to more of your work!  

~Sheri

"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"


Michael
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California


5 posted 05-23-2001 12:48 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow - there's a severe intensity beneath the surface of this one.  An appreciation for what once was, yet a bitterness for what remains.  Welcome to Passions, btw.  Good poem.


Michael
JLR
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6 posted 05-23-2001 01:19 PM       View Profile for JLR   Email JLR   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JLR

Damages to be assessed or just ignored...understood this well.  Welcome!
Rain
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since 05-23-2001
Posts 21
Atlanta, GA


7 posted 05-23-2001 01:41 PM       View Profile for Rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rain

Thanks so much, everyone, for the warm welcome.  I appriciate it!  Will look forward to getting to know everyone a bit.

[This message has been edited by Rain (edited 05-23-2001).]

1slick_lady
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since 12-22-2000
Posts 6147
standing on a shadow's lace


8 posted 05-23-2001 02:49 PM       View Profile for 1slick_lady   Email 1slick_lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit 1slick_lady's Home Page   View IP for 1slick_lady

these words are powerful pain...welcome to passions...helen
PoeticKnight
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since 01-20-2000
Posts 1151
New Orleans, LA


9 posted 05-23-2001 02:55 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

Wonderful imagery and personification.
angelbear
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since 05-22-2001
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North East, USA


10 posted 05-23-2001 03:08 PM       View Profile for angelbear   Email angelbear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelbear


great poem and wonderful words..  
Kay
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since 04-13-2001
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11 posted 05-23-2001 03:10 PM       View Profile for Kay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kay

Welcome to Passions, this is a lovely poem

Kay
Let no one who loves be called unhappy. Even love unreturned has its rainbow." ~James M. Barrie~

Saunni
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since 07-11-2000
Posts 1798
West Virginia


12 posted 05-25-2001 01:06 PM       View Profile for Saunni   Email Saunni   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saunni

The morning after always comes...cool line here. I loved the whole poem! Great write.  

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

Cerenity
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since 02-16-2000
Posts 2712
Escondido-California


13 posted 05-25-2001 01:55 PM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi Rain,

Wonderful first post and welcome to Passions I for sure will be looking forward to more of your writing,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)


Sven
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Lansing, MI USA


14 posted 05-25-2001 02:04 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

this is excellent. . . the storms of life can really make us better. . . as long as we learn from them. . .

and, sometimes, after the storm, the sun can let you see what really matters. . .

well done, and welcome. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Watersign6
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since 05-25-2001
Posts 839
Hurricane,WV


15 posted 05-25-2001 02:41 PM       View Profile for Watersign6   Email Watersign6   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watersign6's Home Page   View IP for Watersign6

loved your poem Rain you are very good
looking forward to reading more of yours
vandana
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since 10-22-1999
Posts 10748
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16 posted 05-25-2001 06:41 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

nice welcome to passions
LAA
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since 05-27-2001
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17 posted 05-27-2001 10:06 AM       View Profile for LAA   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for LAA

Potent, and deliberate, a rewarding read!

LAA
passing shadows
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displaced


18 posted 05-21-2004 01:07 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

very well done! love this!
 
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