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Morgoth
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since 2001-05-21

Posts 26
Baltimore, MD

0 posted 2001-05-23 09:41 AM

Is this a Haiku?
I really need to know now
I hope that it is

[This message has been edited by Morgoth (edited 05-23-2001).]

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-05-23 09:48 AM

More a Senryu, as Haiku deals with nature on a 5-7-5 count of syllables. Senryu deals with man, and from what I've seen, everything else not related to nature....

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2001-05-23 10:06 AM

Is this a flower
Because it has proper form?
Perhaps it is silk.

Is this an ocean,
Because the taste is salty,
Perhaps just a bay.

Form and it’s content,
The argued defining style,
But it’s shape it is.

Gloom

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

3 posted 2001-05-23 10:12 AM

(pssssst - you also need to add one more syllable to your middle line making it seven as Sunshine says...)

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Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

4 posted 2001-05-23 12:55 PM

I count seven in the middle

I real ly need to know now
1 2 3 4 5 6 7

Thank you Sunshine, I didn't know either the difference between the various types.

Go on Morgoth, you'll get the hang of it, it's fun to do.

Titia

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

5 posted 2001-05-23 01:02 PM

counting in your head
syllable by syllable
makes it easy, see?

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-05-23 08:33 PM

I always use my fingers to count the syllables Morgoth. . . LOL. . . it's really the only way that I can be sure. . .

good job with this one. . .

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2dalimit
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since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

7 posted 2001-05-25 05:30 AM

Haikus or Senryus
With passionate imagery
Mentally profiled

Haikus or Senryus
Through the mind of the reader.
Poetic painting

Welcome to PIP
Melton

Songbird
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since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

8 posted 2001-05-25 06:16 PM

Just learning about these myself..

Is this a portrait
or perhaps it's a landscape
regardless still life

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