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angelbear
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since 2001-05-22
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0 posted 2001-05-22 03:28 PM



Daytime enters my dwindling thoughts
if not to wake in me the truth,
colored now in comic hues,
betray me for a finer youth.

Purpose dances beyond a grasp
small fingers with a will,
as babies hands form fists of rage,
my truth will flourish still.

The rain sounds bleak against the noise
of clattering news and cartoons;
send the past with no regret,
away in a cloud of circus balloons.

© Copyright 2001 Cryan - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-05-22 03:39 PM


For a first try, the imagery is wonderful!  Welcome to Passions!  Please check your e-mail for a special message!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




DYME
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2 posted 2001-05-22 03:45 PM


That was good. I liked it. Welcome to Passions.

NO WEAPON FORMED AGAINST ME SHALL PROSPER... ISAIAH 54:17

Irish Rose
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3 posted 2001-05-22 03:50 PM


Welcome to Passions, I love to see a new face, I mean read a fresh mind!
This is very good!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Titia Geertman
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4 posted 2001-05-22 04:54 PM


Like it too, welcome, you'll be amongst friends.

Titia

Mabel A. Dilley
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5 posted 2001-05-22 09:51 PM


Welcome. I liked it muchly.

"I am not now that which I have been."

rosepetals25
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6 posted 2001-05-23 12:21 PM


angelbear,


    Welcome to Passions You will like it here I promise!  And what a wonderful first post I liked it.

TaraB

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7 posted 2001-05-24 12:23 PM


angelbear,

Welcome once again to our family of friends.  I told you I'd be looking for your first post and here it is.  What a nice one full of interesting imagery.  Just great!  

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

angelbear
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since 2001-05-22
Posts 139
North East, USA
8 posted 2001-05-24 12:00 PM


Just want to say thank you to all of your welcomes and comments. I appreciate the friendliness here and love reading all of your wonderful and insightful work....I am glad I am here.

Until you are are near it, you will never see it, until you live it you will never know it...this is why we must not judge it.

Sven
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9 posted 2001-05-27 09:47 PM


good for your first try. . . keep going. . . you're getting there. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

latin passion
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10 posted 2001-05-27 10:48 PM


Welcome to Passions, I like your icon, your poetry I'll read.

My faith is but the size my mustard seed. I'll turn the other cheek in my love for mankind - not pride.

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