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Marina
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0 posted 2001-05-22 10:20 AM


Drowning in Dad's Tears


I believe in the holes that offer those in Heaven
A chance to view loved ones that still walk Earth's plane
I'm undoubted in fact, of just how much they really do see
More perhaps then that mirror we stand before each day
As they bear witness to our triumphs and tribulations
Yet they can say nothing, leaving it in the hands of Karma

On most nights and into early hours of morn
These thoughts leave me with tranquillity and comfort
So it may strike you as odd that of late I wander
Walking the house, digging out pictures of happier times
Yet my conscience in good faith wrestles the unknown
Begging my very being for answers that only you hold

So tell me now and I'll swear not another question more
Still dream? Or entrapped inside your own nightmare?
Does he haunt you through the ample hole within your soul?
How do you sleep upon your newly acquired waterbed?
But such insignificant questions trivialise, so I'll cut to the chase
Are you jaded from gagging? Because I have no doubt
You must be drowning in Dad's tears


Marina May 21/2001



It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley


[This message has been edited by Marina (edited 05-22-2001).]

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2001-05-22 12:55 PM


Marina...this is a very intense and personal write..
very layered and complex...
your imagery of heaven is very cool and well conceived...
and your obviously working thru some old ghosts and pain...
well written and deep,
I hope you find the answers you need and all involved can heal, which is the best reason to write this kind of emotions out.
take care and hugs Marina-girlie.

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

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2 posted 2001-05-22 01:11 PM


What Janet Marie said and ... WOW.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


Parker
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3 posted 2001-05-23 10:45 AM


I've read it over a number of times and its an interesting write with new thoughts in each read.  very good  

James

brian madden
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4 posted 2001-05-29 03:13 PM


On most nights and into early hours of morn
These thoughts leave me with tranquillity and comfort
So it may strike you as odd that of late I wander
Walking the house, digging out pictures of happier times
Yet my conscience in good faith wrestles the unknown
Begging my very being for answers that only you hold

Some wonderfully penned images here,  powerful write.

"you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see"  Whipping boy

ethome
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5 posted 2001-05-29 03:25 PM


I have to agree with the rest....powerful but personal write. Wrestling with yourself or the deeds of a sibling I don't know....but I really got into the entire of this piece... excellent portrayal of inner feelings...and that ending well, that's something else!

"Faith is the ASSURED expectation of things hoped for. The EVIDENT demonstration of realities though not beheld."

Have a nice day!

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2001-06-02 04:50 PM


Enjoyed reading your poem...James
Logan
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7 posted 2001-06-02 09:17 PM


ahh, nice, and how do we know that they do not speak, but through the words of others that we read and hear, sent from afar to give you answers they wish to tell. Who knows if the next words you have, are for an answer you seek? nice thoughts, good pondering...gentle smile
Kit McCallum
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8 posted 2001-06-02 09:20 PM


Powerfully written Marina ... a very intense piece, really well done.  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Joyce Johnson
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9 posted 2001-06-02 09:27 PM


This is intense and leaves many questions to baffle us.  You have lost your Mom?  or a sibling?.  Whatever it is I am sure you are helping to dry your Dad's tears.  Joyce
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