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Fishermen's Haul
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Fishermen's Haul |
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IceNeyes New Member
since 2001-05-20
Posts 9 |
fishermans haul the richest catch of all so easily guided by our weaknesses in one cast of the net strain to harvest the floundering souls One eyed dying creatures still ask why we fools tossed life in its demands of love aside |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Oops, I am lost. Are you saying fish have souls, or are you using fish as symbols for humans? Sorry, I am very confused by this ... please illucidate. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
after the word "aside" in the last line, if one were to add the word "in", and take it back up to the first line to be read again, the rondo would be complete.... the circle of life.... encircling lost love.... Bravo! |
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