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View of a Lighthouse
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View of a Lighthouse |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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~For J~ There’s nothing left to say about lighthouses you said as if denied I’ve stood beneath one: a mountain is across from it hidden by hills I know how tall Taranaki is I stood on his summit yet the lighthouse at Cape Egmont covered me taller than sky and white with rust it told me of shaping driftwood at night - cold hands rubbing the shore in search of masterpiece it wants to wade out in the sea wrecking ships but there are no ships to wreck the coast is silent the lighthouse lights alone wave-watching I listened to the slight groan of metal in the sea wind I’m no romantic beacon it said no disguise for the light of nereids on the balcony gulls alighted I watched their wings flap and settle – claiming territory this lighthouse looked out over the Tasman and I felt the weight of my freedom there is nothing left to say it murmured denied [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 05-22-2001).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, This was a delight to read. Enjoyed Sy |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You beam a light of joy in the reader's eye. You are as unpredictable in your perspectives as shifting tides. yet as steady in the quality of your work as the rocks they crash upon. Loved this Liz |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I think the term Rock-steady should be changed to Lighthouse-steady... Errrr...  back to the real world... thoroughly enjoyed this one, Kamla... Regards, Sudhir P.S. this is what I had written some time back on lighthouses: /pip/Forum37/HTML/002196.html |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is delicious, and strong. I think I understand the last part the best. Peace Sandra |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
the inescapable touch of your write pleases me always |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I could see it in my mind's eye  Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Severn .... (.."the slight groan of metal in the sea wind..." Applause....from an old marine insurance adjuster. Bob |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Okay, so there is more to say, and you said it very well indeed. You know how I love this.  HK>LK There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Kamla, I often put lighthouses in my paintings. I love the romantic feelings they represent. And of course, there's a certain loneliness that goes with their allure. A wonderful write, my friend. It's great to see a post from you. Michael Proust- |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Well K, such a vivid poem hon, I even saw myself standing under that lighthouse. An excellent poem from you K as usual and uniquely you. I loved it all, especially the ending. hugs hon Mmy |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you had me with the title. . . and kept me with the words. . . loving lighthouses as I do. . . this was excellent. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This reminded me of the beautiful lighthouses I saw on Martha's Vineyard last year,. Kathleen Blake |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice Severn...James |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Oh there are so many fine lines here with fantastic imaging...love the forming driftwood with cold hands... Being a lover of lighthouses and their intent, I am wondering if I'm understanding one stanza... "it wants to wade out in the sea wrecking ships" Is the 'it' the lighthouse? I can't see a lighthouse, the protector of sailors and ships, wanting to be the wrecker. Help me understand this section. Again, there are some wonderfully woven, captivating lines in this, I enjoyed the read save for the above conundrum. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla--You always are so unique in your perception...your vision touches me. Wonderful write...I've missed your poetry! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I felt the weight of my freedom there is nothing left to say it murmured Now you are just showing off making this look so easy :P but seriously this is good stuff, beautiful writing. "you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see" Whipping boy |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hi Sy Thankyou matey...I appreciate you stopping in... Lizzy Your faith in my writing really helps me you know? Miss you Mom 2. Hey Suddy ~grins~ lighthouse steady heh. Nice to see you here...and thanks for the link m'friend.. Sandra Thank you. I aim for strength - so if I succeed it's great LiW Why thanks...I appreciate it Interloper and that is great because I wanted clear cut imagery - thank you! RMW glad it had an impact...yay! Jamie Well..it was for you after all so you have to like it by default sweetheart heh...hugs Michael Thanks! I don't post often it's true... Mmy hugs back and smiles. Sven many people seem to love lighthouses don't they? Thank you! Kathleen I have no concept of Martha's vineyard...obviously it's on the coast somewhere lol..thank you James thankyou for stopping in VAS hi. I wanted to subvert the lighthouses. The whole premise of this poem is that there is nothing left to say about lighthouses - except what they tell us themselves...so I imagined listening to a lighthouse...a rather angry young lighthouse lol..who wanted to get out and deny the meaning of it's existence...hope that makes sense...thanks for commenting and querying...Martie Thanks hon...haven't been round too much lately...popping in and out and things lol... Brian - sticking out tongue at YOU...just showing off heh...lol..thanks Cheers all  K |
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LAA Junior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 11 |
Great substance to your words, one obtains a feeling of being encased by the movement. LAA |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Thankyou LAA...and welcome to passions.. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I would like it regardless.. so there...lol hk>lk |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Just wondering--how long since you have stood beneath it? There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
the dreaded double post... [This message has been edited by Jamie (edited 11-18-2001).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
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