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Lone Wolf
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Lansing, MI USA

0 posted 2001-05-21 09:49 PM




my heart beats for you
my eyes sparkle with your love
the wind speaks your name

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer L. Garcia - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2001-05-21 09:58 PM


perfect, LW! I do so wish I could do haiku justice!

the wind speaks your name


five syllables and you manage to convey that "presence" felt while in love...just beautiful, lady!

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-05-21 10:48 PM


This is truly lovely, Jennifer

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada
3 posted 2001-05-22 12:42 PM


Lovely thoughts in this.  Nicely done.

Poeminister

mistyrose
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since 2001-04-21
Posts 75
state of anxiety
4 posted 2001-05-22 01:17 AM


Lone Wolf.....

simply put

this is true beauty

great job

mistyrose~*

VAS
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since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
5 posted 2001-05-22 01:25 AM


lovely, lovely

so much in 3 lines

Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182
Netherlands
6 posted 2001-05-22 02:00 PM



He sure has heard you
As he turns the wind around
to send you his love

Beautiful haiku you wrote Jennifer

Titia

[This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (edited 05-22-2001).]

Morgoth
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since 2001-05-21
Posts 26
Baltimore, MD
7 posted 2001-05-22 03:04 PM


For me? Wow thanks. Just kidding.

Great one.

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

8 posted 2001-05-22 06:55 PM


back for another read, I really enjoyed this one, Jennifer.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
9 posted 2001-05-22 07:46 PM


serenity:  Thank you, my friend.  Aw, come on.  Try one, you may just be surprised!

Kathleen:  Thank you much!  

Poeminister:  Happy you enjoyed!

Mistyrose:  Sometimes life's joys lie in the simple things.  

VAS:  You are so right.

Titia:  Thank you for the reply.  Very beautifully written.  

Morgoth:  Shhh!!  It's supposed to be a secret it's for you!!  

Kathleen:  You have made me smile, sweetheart.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
10 posted 2001-05-22 08:15 PM


You describe a wonderful and mysterious feeling very well with this form. I love this.


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