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Gladly to Doom
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Gladly to Doom |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Lured by your promises of smoke and dust I followed you gladly held by my lust You were the one who filled me with fire Who held me high and met my desire You were the true love that I'd never known I looked to you, for the promise you'd shown You led, I followed… gladly to doom Although the ending came much too soon Our own destruction, led by our hand All that we suffered by our own command Our bodies entwined as we became one Were met with resistance of things left undone You hold your secrets; I hold mine too Coming together is something I rue Our past has caught up, as love turns to rust Fuelled by my laughter, maimed by my lust. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Kethry I don't understand a lust for dust, but the poem is well crafted. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
oh, yes, this is so sad......Kethry, so sad. fueling lust will do this to a poet lady! Kathleen Blake |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
there's a lot of power and passion in these words Kethry. . . you communicate them well. . . excellent my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O Kethry, I feel for you, my friend... and send you (((hugs))) Regards, Sudhir |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
has much meaning to me.Kethry..huggs M "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
 This stings well. I LOVE this. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The last line is a perfect ending, Keth.... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"maimed by lust"... geesh... that, my friend, is quite descriptive... but i say, what's wrong with lust and tears? don't steal that line, it's poem in the works... "lust and tears"... also a cd... you'll see... maybe... lol great writing here missy "maimed by lust"... hmmm... now THAT's a thought... and here i am always thinking that Lust offers the passion of Life we all seek...... lol...... gotta hand it to you...  ... you did a great job with this and after being maimed, maybe you'd like to have a hand or two? *grinenjoyed this ... thanks for the read  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks everyone, for your responses. I'm not sure what I meant by this poem, it was a small emotional hemorrage that leaked onto the page and then to here. doreen I'll try not to steal your words, though they are such good words. You haven't copywrited them yet have you *worried frown* Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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