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On Broken Wings
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On Broken Wings |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada 
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 On Broken WingsHer broken wings goes unnoticed, in hidden tears. Each tear mirrors thoughts of shame and fear. Like torrents of rain beating on a tight drum, They play out the past like an ancient ritual, Over and over, the drums become louder and louder! Her thoughts flow downstream in sluices, So cold, spine tingling, chilling, and surreal. Biting a lip to silence a scream of recollection, They send shards of pain like electricity. Flashbacks play over and over like a skipping record. They torture and torment her body and soul, Her dignity squeezed from within like a dirty dishrag, And she feels so filthy and covered in shame. Like some movie reel going too fast now, The scene plays over and over in her mind. She wished he had killed her; he had come so close, She felt the coldness of the steel, on her hot chest. The five scars that remained from his anger are visual. Yes, you can see them, but it is the ones you can’t see, That continues to dissect her like morning butcher’s meat. Most days, thoughts come streaming in on her wings in horror. So many times has she re-lived it, over and over, feeling it. Every time, re-living the degrading, sick, violation done. It took him only five minutes to change her life, Only five minutes to suck the love from her heart and soul. Each day becomes a challenge to simply walk with pride, Constantly watching over her shoulder to see her wings intact. Feelings that were natural, trust, love, believing in man, Fall at her feet unnoticed like floating feathers. ~* With respect this is dedicated *~ to all survivors of rape Artist: Dianne Rivers music: My Child ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Feelings that were natural, trust, love, believing in man. Fall at her feet unnatural like floating feathers." You have written well of a sad subject...James |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Sharon, It would be my hope that every man could read this poem and know how rape could so change and torment a woman's life. I wish you peace, my friend, and healing. Michael Proust- |
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Morgoth Junior Member
since 2001-05-21
Posts 26Baltimore, MD |
This is absolutely stunning and powerful. Its a shame anything like that exists, but that is the nature of the world. The picture is perfect for the poem also. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It took him only five minutes to change her life, Only five minutes to suck the love from her heart and soul. Each day becomes a challenge to simply walk with pride, Constantly watching over her shoulder to see her wings intact. Feelings that were natural, trust, love, believing in man, Fall at her feet unnoticed like floating feathers. ==================== Sharon this is disturbing and powerful piece of writing, and speaks volumes to the truths no one wants to see... one moment in time can forever change, forever scar... when humanity, dignity,innocence, and trust are taken away the wounds are often unhealing. And this kind of loss can come in many forms of abuse. For those who live it...you have my compassion and prayers. well done poetess Mysteria We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
James Michael: Thank you for acknowledging the aftermath of this type of tragedy, as it never, ever goes away for the victims. Auguste: Thank you for the empahthy shown for victims of this abuse, and I too wish this were on the walls of men's washrooms, or something similar, as it only takes seconds to change a life forever. Thank you. Morgoth: It was not until I found this art could I even write about this, and I am glad the message is clear, thank you so much. Janet Marie: YOU speak volumes on the subject, and rape is not the only violation that can sometimes not be reversed, verbal abuse can sometimes be worse, for a scar heals, but how do you once again make some one feel whole? Thank you for your response, acknowledgement of this violation is imperative to stop it! Thank you all for those that suffer daily! |
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Martha Cowan Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 240Groves, Texas |
Sharon, this brought me to tears, a subject I can well relate to as well... I know how this has caused you so much pain, but somehow you have managed to get those wings back into the air...and you are soaring above the memories that can be so binding and draining. When we find times along the way our wings begin to tire from the storms of yesterday...we'll simply FLY TOGETHER....(smiles to you) Hugs and wishes that your day is wonderful. Love ya muches, dawn |
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Secret Whisper Member
since 2001-01-25
Posts 298Through the Looking Glass |
Wonderful piece, and so moving. The horrors are so wonderfully expressed with the imagery of the internal scars. I loved it. "What I was living, the same am I now, dead." --Capaneus, THE INFERNO |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
You have written this quite well, to take the soul of another, and transform it when they cannot, so that all can see the terror and suffering done, and received.... I applaud you my dear, for something that is never easy to do. |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Excellent poetic treatment of a difficult subject. There needs to be much more education aimed at male audiences than there is currently, along with rage management. Many continue to believe that rape is a sexual act only. In actuallity rape is rage-filled violence toward women. As usual most of our education on this matter is aimed toward providing women with information rather than men. Enough. Off my soap box. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Very well written, very powerful poem. [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 05-23-2001).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I really can't think of words to respond to your powerful poetry...just know I read it..and was touched by the strenth of your words ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is superb. . . every man who cares about women should read this. . . and every man who doesn't should read this as well. . . excellent. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Thank you for a presentation that should allow every woman the dignity she was born with! Well done. Kathleen Blake |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very moving and disressing The truth well presented in this piece I hope all will read this one Liz |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I want to thank you all from the bottom of my heart for your responses. I so want to tell you that this is "just a poem" but this is reality at its worst. Well, quite simply I saw a piece of art that I felt would lend itself to the subject of rape, and I am so glad you all appreciated what I was trying to present, as this is a subject so prevalent in society today. I had a girl in mind when I wrote this that went on an internet date, and was given a drug "Black Beauty" in her drink, needless to say, she she now flys with a broken wing, but she was a lucky one, some die from that drug! Thanks again for your support of this piece. |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
this is a reality you write about so well and i wish it never happened but it does unfortunately and this poem had tears streaming down my face when i read it because i know so many women and girls go through this and it strips them of everything,your poem should be read to all men well actually to all abusers so they would know what their actions cause the victims,thank you for writing this  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Watersign6: I do volunteer with abused victims, as I was a victim, so know first hand how long and how badly this sticks with you, but you have to let it go and move on, as 99% of the time they were just that, a "victim", and must learn to be a survivor! ~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them ~*~ [This message has been edited by Mysteria (edited 06-05-2001).] |
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