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casting dew |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I wish that you would understand half of me thinks-- that you do, but still I yearn the flesh-touched hand-- skin of me on skin of you... I recognized the look of sly the cast of amber in brown eye-- the way you look away low-browed and watch the sundown casting dew. I know I am a cost to pay-- so sorry that I am this way, but I can't stop the life in me that reaches out in gut of scream-- every night cries out in day-- another path to walk this way... every sunrise, every morn-- I wish that I could be reborn or at least be made anew retreating steps back home to you. "I cannot...": I say aloud... my voice in quiver, sound of shroud, "I cannot take another step..." echoes of my doubt, they lept down the valley, to the walls, of canyon to the break of falls, "EVERYTHING...." I shriek to none as if I were the only one to ever dare an echo's yell in brave of bluff--send me to Hell. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 05-21-2001).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
"skin of me on skin of you" this is one I can relate to here...but never apologize for being a certain way...I learned that. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
WOW... Regards, Sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I wish that you would understand half of me thinks-- that you do, but still I yearn the flesh-touched hand-- skin of me on skin of you... I recognized the look of sly the cast of amber in brown eye-- the way you look away low-browed and watch the sundown casting dew. I know I am a cost to pay-- so sorry that I am this way, but I can't stop the life in me that reaches out in gut of scream-- every night cries out in day-- another path to walk this way... every sunrise, every morn-- I wish that I could be reborn or at least be made anew retreating steps back home to you. ============================ you already know what I want to say... so I will just let it be ... and instead tell you ... YOU ARE AN AMAZING poet!!! you make me feel every line...*sigh* ...(you know why)  me |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW... you know you have short of words here. I can see that this poem runs deep and all I can say is that I hope that the future brings better things because you deserve them. Take care, smiles.  "across the unfair divide |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
your poetry is inspirational! I need to take more risk in mine, branch out, be bold, be something...I'm rambling... Kathleen Blake |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Goodness! serenity, this is a powerful piece of work. Such excellent imagery here. Michael Proust- |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Serenity-Sharply conveyed feelings with this piece. Wonderful write. Poeminister |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Marvelous poem missy!!! I'd like to know why you chose those two words as your title? Why those and not others????? You always have such unique titles to go with your poems and I've often wondered how you determine what the title shall be........... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Passing shadows---I think that's my favorite part too--  and it's not so much of an apology as it is an acknowledgement that I am---hmmm...how to put it? Just that I'm quite adventurous at times and life with me can be tumultuous.  Thank you, for reading!sudhir...smiling here, you KNOW I love your 'WOW'S' ---thank you so much dearheart! JM--yer pretty amazing yourself (will get to the prose--there is MUCH to think about there and I want to do it justice) thank you m'twin as always, just for BEING! brian...there's my buddy---now tell me you have the summer off and are sticking around a bit? (say yes-- ) Thank you, m'bud! Kathleen? Does that make you a rambling rose? and you're so funny because I have been reading your sonnets and thinking I needed to write more disciplined! LOL@BOTH of us! Michael, I'm such an admirer of yours that it always thrills me to know that you've read and possibly enjoyed my work! My gratitude to you! Poe? I've missed your words of encouragement--thank you for popping in to see me once again! Sharon? Funny you should ask (somehow I'm always saying that to you) because this one gave me trouble...I usually try to choose a phrase from the poem that sums up what I'm trying to convey..this one DID give me trouble because I wrote it so fast and it WAS like a spatter of thought...so I just thought "casting dew" described best how I felt while writing it. Thanks for asking--and as always, thank you for reading and being so supportive! My grats to all and hugs as well. Thanks again. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi S, I have missed being here so often, and this is the first poem I read this week. I am overwhelmed with this. Your writing always touches me, the images here and the clarity of longing and love, so pure. I love it. Sandra |
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