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Temptress
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0 posted 2001-05-21 02:35 AM


This gets a little forced at the end...but how can I not go with the flow of the inspiration? Who could deny inspiration its moody contrasts? *sighs*
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So easily we fall prey to tears,
Open wounds and gashes are fears,
Entangled all within pretend,
Love's whispered moments come to end,
That doubting season within our hearts,
Roaming serenity in painless starts.
Insistently peaceful within the plot,
Where love stands proudly tied in knots.
We bite our lips, on firm ground stand,
Our own self check, our reprimand.
Douse the flame with the fire of lust,
For pretend is the word, a habit we must,
Have constantly on our faithful side,
So by love's tears we don't have to abide.
And then one day we find we're alone,
Stolen by a moment, having never grown.
Then we turn back and wonder why,
We yearn from within with no reply.
Love's a battered and beaten road,
But still we carry a heavy load.
Choking and weathering the smoke of the storm,
Lightning rods surround a love in reform.
Learning long ago to never flinch,
When the crack is made, and the seal is cinched.
And there are times when unrequite,
Seems ever a word with unbearable fright.
And on this track, this beaten path,
We drown sometimes in the aftermath,
Of love so readily tossed aside,
Having settled its heart on a mere joyride.
And torn apart, our souls the cost,
To love unreturned, yet never lost.
And here nude I stand in desperate pretend,
That I'm not part of this enamoring trend,
But my act is wavering, I'm no longer the star,
As my will grows weaker, I'm falling far,
From lushly flowered friendship's road,
The thud of my heart, it wishes to enfold.
I'm centered here, a heart to feel,
And desperately clinging to my forgone will,
But heaviness seaks a longer home,
And I'm here wishing I had grown.
So forgive my intent and my appeal,
Its just simply something I can't cease to feel.
And so I have my tears in the end,
To wish my hurt they would mend.
So when I said "I love you, ______"
I meant to say "You, I dwell upon."
So close is this, you'll forgive me I'm sure,
But its in my heart and I know it so pure.
And each time I try to hold this at bay,
I remember you said you wanted it this way,
To hear what I'm feeling no matter the cost,
But I don't tell you that often,
For a haunting feeling that our friendship would be lost.
So forgive me this please, this immeasurable ounce,
Love undecided I must passionately announce.
But fear not the wrath of this impossible love,
For sake of friendship, I can rise above.





still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.


[This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 05-21-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-05-21 02:51 AM


I so can relate, and where do you draw the line between friendship and love, and the guilt of trying to have both can eat you away. "They" say friends makes the best lovers, and soul mates eventually, so if you can take from a relationship that which is there now, and not think about what you want it to be, or wrestle with the fear of loosing it entirely, I think this might be the answer. I bet this poem speaks loudly for so many, and you certainly did a great job of the emotions!  Bravo girl!

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Deep in the heart
2 posted 2001-05-21 10:05 AM


Well done.  Write on.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


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3 posted 2001-05-21 10:39 AM


The critique you've already made.

The dilemma...well I think being friends is most important.  For, when the violent, passionate love/lust wanes, the friendship will cause the relationship to endure and the 'real' love to be pure and guard and hold the hearts.

Temptress
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4 posted 2001-05-21 12:38 PM


Thank you all for your thoughts on this. If anything...there will always be dilemmas to solve in life. Worry not, my friends.  

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5 posted 2001-05-22 03:37 PM


Excellent poem... very well written... and not rambling at all. *S*
Irish Rose
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6 posted 2001-05-22 03:48 PM


believe me, sometimes the most beautiful, enduring friendships are the ones that begin with passion!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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7 posted 2001-05-22 04:58 PM


Awesome...if you can find the answer on how to be friends, and lovers let us know.
nakdthoughts
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8 posted 2001-05-22 05:54 PM


definitely felt this one, Temptress...the feelings that  are pent up have to come out some way...writing  helps..*s

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



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9 posted 2001-05-22 06:22 PM


But, when a friendship begins with passion, what is there after the passion fades??

Just another question from this poem. . . and your critique is correct. . .

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