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Behind the Veil

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Michael
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0 posted 05-20-2001 10:25 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

BEHIND THE VEIL

Sunlight filters through the room,
I wake to face another day.
A world of lifeless, listless gloom,
I let all caring slip away.

The shadows linger in the hall
As my feet meet the cold damp floor.
Such wicked penchant in her call,
I know this day was meant for more.

And yet the dim lit walls would groan
Their displeasure in my grave tread;
As to announce, for me alone,
Measures marked here but for the dead.

I listen to their grievous cry,
And wonder of a lifetime past;
As thought recoils from a lie
That holds both eyes and heart downcast.

An angel of my darkest day,
She blurs my vision to a tear,
Rapes my hope and bleeds away
All convictions of yesteryear...

Until, from frozen revery,
I wake to Darkness with a sigh.
Perchance, ‘tis but my destiny
That ev'ry day before me die.

Yet no remorse is found within
The echoes of this lonely trail.
I'll stumble and I'll fall again
Before the eyes behind the veil.

And if in sorrow, if in dream,
Perchance the sun shall rise again;
Would not be wise that I should deem
It more than a "remember when..."

Michael Anderson


But dreams of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned and die.


EAP


[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 05-20-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 05-20-2001 10:29 PM       View Profile for rosepetals25   Email rosepetals25   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rosepetals25

Michael,

     Oh how sad Beautifully written, but sad. Hugs to you.

TaraB

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2 posted 05-20-2001 10:30 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

Micheal..
This is awesome..I miss your work, but when you do post here, there is a gift to be treasured.  
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3 posted 05-20-2001 10:37 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

sad, yes...but truly lovely as always...

I loved this--so personal in its anxiety--

"As to announce, for me alone,
Measures marked here but for the dead."

(Okay, okay, so haven't had my coffee...   )

And then...

"Until, from frozen revery,
I wake to Darkness with a sigh.
Perchance, ‘tis but my destiny
That ev'ry day before me die."

--couldn't help but think of the Apostle Paul here, dying daily...

somebody smash my fingers here I go again:
"I'll stumble and I'll fall again
Before the eyes behind the veil."

Perfect. I will paraphrase a favorite quote from a favorite movie and tell ya:

"Ya make me wanna be a better poet..."
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4 posted 05-20-2001 10:44 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Beautifully written, Michael, an honest portrait of that place beyond pain.

Corinne
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5 posted 05-20-2001 11:14 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

The shadows linger in the hall
As my feet meet the cold damp floor.
Such wicked penchant in her call,
I know this day was meant for more.

And yet the dim lit walls would groan
Their displeasure in my grave tread;
As to announce, for me alone,
Measures marked here but for the dead.

I listen to their grievous cry,
And wonder of a lifetime past;
As thought recoils from a lie
That holds both eyes and heart downcast.
===============================

Did ya just know I needed to read your rhymes tonite *S*
superb stark imagery and spatterings of inner ryhme along with your always divine cadence and line rhyme
but tis the intensity and depth of the emotions express that hold me to every word.
and ditto me twin-sen...with one correction...
you make us ALL want to be better poets  
Excellence poet M,
jm
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6 posted 05-20-2001 11:35 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

Good to see you again, Michael, thanks for a wonderful read.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

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7 posted 05-21-2001 04:13 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

This goes back to the top, Mike.  
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8 posted 05-21-2001 04:58 PM       View Profile for Morgoth   Email Morgoth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Morgoth

I am new in here, and just came across this really well done poem and had to say how much I liked reading it. It fits me to a "T". Awesome poetry here.
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9 posted 05-21-2001 07:06 PM       View Profile for VAS   Email VAS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for VAS

Wonderful, Michael, deep and heart felt.  You do profound, lovely emotions so superbly!
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10 posted 05-21-2001 07:36 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

You are the master poet. This is deep and well written! Every poem you write makes me read it holding my breath.....waiting to exhale from the sheer joy of reading you!  
Michael
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11 posted 05-21-2001 09:28 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Thank you each and all for your kind replies.



Michael
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12 posted 05-22-2001 07:07 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

"I listen to their grievous cry,
And wonder of a lifetime past;
As thought recoils from a lie
That holds both eyes and heart downcast."

"Until, from frozen revery,
I wake to Darkness with a sigh.
Perchance, ‘tis but my destiny
That ev'ry day before me die."

A beautifully lyrical glimpse into the depths of sorrow Michael ... some mornings, it just feels like the day is over before it even begins. Wonderful cadence and rhyme as always  ... I so enjoy your writing, it always makes me ponder . Thank you for this beautiful read this morning.  

Best wishes,
/Kit
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13 posted 05-22-2001 04:28 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Sheer perfection, Michael... I don't think I remembered to breathe while reading! *S* Such intense sorrow... so superbly written!
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14 posted 05-26-2001 03:26 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

powerful and very dark. take care


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sad write
 
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