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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2001-05-20 08:19 AM


(3) For the days pass away like smoke,
and  my bones burn like a furnace,
(4) My heart is smitten like grass, and withered;
I forgot to eat my bread.
(5) Because of my loud groaning
my bones cleave to my flesh.
(6) I am like a vulture of the wilderness,
like an owl of the waste places;
(7) I lie awake,
I am the lonely bird on the housetop.

Winter is gone and still my soul is cold,
My only warmth is living's burning pain,
Ears hear only those passing that will scold,
Or laugh as I lie broken in the drain.
Limping off to escape the cruel torment,
To search for crumbs left after some large meal,
Finding no morsels collapsing all spent,
Existing in moments I lack all real.
Gaunt and pale in the alley's heaps of waste,
The perfume of decay anoints my brow,
No where left to wander, no need for haste,
Final existence is left to me now.
No copper is tossed in my spirits cup,
Lacking emotions for the soul to sup.

Gloom


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joycerogers
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1 posted 2001-05-20 11:00 AM


I enjoy reading contemporary poetic psalms.  I don't see many reads like this, so when I do I really relish the moment. That's why I was thrilled to see how you set this up with psalm verses and then a poem following the verse.  David is and always will be, my poetic mentor.

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Quiet Thunder, rumble
Through my cloud.
Touch my secret parts
Where only you are allowed. - Joyce Rogers

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2 posted 2001-05-20 08:53 PM


I am glad I found this before it disappeared. Very well done.  Not easy to play off of the psalms in this manner.  Joyce
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3 posted 2001-05-21 01:40 AM


I agree with Joyce you did an excellent job playing off the psalms, and I really like your style.  I will definitely be looking for you from now on Gloom, and I kinda like your name too. Great poem, and your homepage is a whole learning experience, which I am enjoying.  Thanks.

~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~
Homepage: http://www.mysteria-poetry.cityslide.com/contents/contents.cfm/451673

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Professor Gloom
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4 posted 2001-05-21 05:20 AM


Thank you, joycerogers,
I am glad you liked these words,
I find much comfort in reading the Old Testament
And the poetic nature of the psalms is good to read.
It’s preferred to make preambles a short,
But I was tempted to put even more before.

Thank you, Joyce Johnson,
I am glad you found it enjoyable.

Thank you, Mysteria,
Inspiration from Psalms is a very old experience,
And I guess my style of gloom even in sonnet form stands out.
There is much of me at my home page, but there is much
That needs to be done, the entire Chinese Translations are a mess,
and several areas are not linked.
But if you haven’t all ready seen them I recommend the Cell Series and
In One Century (in the Old section).
I have been impressed by your presentation of poetry.

Gloom

2dalimit
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Mississippi coast
5 posted 2001-05-21 07:38 AM


Excellent.
You keep writin em. I'll keep readin em.
Melton

Professor Gloom
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6 posted 2001-05-21 07:54 AM


Thank you, 2dalimit,
I write more than I post,
but I am pleased to know people read.
Your words are kind.

Gloom

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2001-06-16 02:53 AM


I thought this just phenomenal. Would love to see more in this same style. There's much here to think upon as well. More, please?
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