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Poet deVine
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The party guests
      delighted
In cheese puffs
and spinach dip

Laughter echoed round the room

So no one saw her slip
       into the room,
             darkened

Coats lay upon the bed
       she sat there
                   on the edge

her hands holding up her head

Silent screams of
       anger

Squeezed tears of her
       dismay

Still no one knew that she
       had just

               slipped away

At the stroke of twelve
she rose
and
left the room
walked
past the partygoers
and into
       the midnight
                 gloom

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1 posted 05-19-2001 09:32 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

wow...this just aches so completely.....excellent, and I do hope not a personal reflection    SEA
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2 posted 05-19-2001 09:34 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

she needs to turn around. . . because someone has seen her. . .

this is from the soul deVine. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Janet Marie
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3 posted 05-19-2001 09:36 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

you define the feeling of "lonely in a crowded room"
well done employ of imagery dressed emotions PDV.

tis never easy being a moth,
tis not easy being the flame.
what some never see is--
sometimes ... most times ...
they are one in the same.

Titia Geertman
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4 posted 05-19-2001 09:47 PM       View Profile for Titia Geertman   Email Titia Geertman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Titia Geertman's Home Page   View IP for Titia Geertman

Oh wow, I know that feeling so well of being alone in a crowded room, been there so many times in the past. You described it so completely, so beautifully.

Thank you for given me a chance to read it.

Titia
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5 posted 05-19-2001 09:48 PM       View Profile for thepoeticplumber   Email thepoeticplumber   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for thepoeticplumber

I could so feel for the lonely creature you depicted.  It is sad that there are people like this with so many in view.  Great writing job.  Roger TPP

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Thank you all....yes...right now, this is me......I'm glad to know there are others who feel this way too.
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it's in the being there that we've done that....

and some of us remember well...

kudos, lady....
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8 posted 05-20-2001 02:27 AM       View Profile for Packratmike   Email Packratmike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Packratmike

Hang in there PdV...I've been there too...actually, I've been feeling kinda "outsidish" lately.  It'll pass.*S*

Mike
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9 posted 05-20-2001 02:34 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Boy do I know this one, sorry to say.  You did a wonderful job of the ache of lonliness.

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10 posted 05-20-2001 08:41 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

If what's on the inside could venture to the outside... everyone would notice - and admire...
Elizabeth Santos
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11 posted 05-20-2001 08:45 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Clinging to every word
Feeling the pain
This is so well written
Liz
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12 posted 05-20-2001 11:01 AM       View Profile for Alan   Email Alan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alan

This is so sad. I too have felt like this. It is not a good feeling but it will pass. Great job writing. I could feel you pain and sadness
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13 posted 05-20-2001 08:22 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

In this I feel the sadness and the longing for someone to just realize. Excellent writing, Sharon. I always say if I can feel something in the words that the poet has done wonders.  
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This is so well done.  The invisible person. I have often felt this way in a new setting.  I cannot imagine that you will be overlooked for long.  This touched me.  Joyce
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Yep, I've been outsidish too...I can relate to the pain in this one well.  Sometime's the pain is worse when you're surrounded by people and feel alone than when you're actually alone...incredible poetry, deVine one.  

*Krista Knutson*

"We can all become what we aspire to be
If Heaven's here on Earth..." ~Tracy Chapman

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Thank you all for liking this...I do appreciate it.
Sudhir Iyer
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17 posted 05-21-2001 05:59 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Excellent writing, O deVine One...

Regards,
Sudhir
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Wow..

blimey

it's like...freeverse! Although I caught the rhymes lol..

seriously Sharon - this is great...loved it.

K

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How well I relate. *S* This is outstanding, PDV... the form is perfect for the subject. Kudos and hugs, dear lady!!
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20 posted 05-22-2001 03:27 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

I have done this, anything to avoid a crowd!  I enjoyed this.

Kathleen Blake

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and the sun drips honey."
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21 posted 05-22-2001 05:04 PM       View Profile for Morgoth   Email Morgoth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Morgoth

Oh, very poignant piece. So sad, but true. A very true to life picture you painted.
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I could walk into the midnight gloom every night...and never be noticed nor missed..

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II


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I LIKED IT. IT WAS NICE.

NO WEAPON FORMED AGAINST ME SHALL PROSPER... ISAIAH 54:17

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Excellent writing...sorry the world seems so dark for you at this moment...James
 
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