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Let Me Be---answering Sven's 'cliché' challenge
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Let Me Be---answering Sven's 'cliché' challenge |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
The following is from the challenge to use a cliché in a way that is not. The line given: Let me be your shelter from the storm, the light within your dark... I'm afraid the 'not' part escaped me, for His promise is never changing, so is likely viewed as trite or cliché Virginia Salter Let me be your shelter from the storm The light within your darkness Truly I invite your reliance, your faith For I AM never changing, yet ever steadfast Ever faithful to My promises, yes everyone Bestow all your cares upon Me Place your woes at My feet Seek My Word, learn my troth, Await the Father’s timing, knowing I will come as a thief in the night Be ready to receive the meat of the covenant Ever ready to know the joy of My love Sip not only on the milk of My blessings But chew, with relish, the truth that is there For your eyes, ears, heart, mind and soul ©May 19, 2001 |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Your faith is inspirational...and that could never be cliche. |
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joycerogers Member
since 2001-05-16
Posts 83Texas |
What a beautiful poem on the "reaching out" essence of Jesus Christ. I truly enjoyed the depth of this poem. Quiet Thunder, rumble |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
VAS, i enjoyed particularly the last stanza...emotions tumbled over me in a rush and i was left with a chuckle... since i have said before that i don't always understand, well, i don't understand why you compared Jesus to a thief in the night that line sort of distracted me i hope i didn't insult you...but i am just curious  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
VAS, You did very well I realy enjoyed this. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
that line is scriptural, faterider, for He will come as a thief in the night, He will not announce before hand the day nor the hour, for He does not know until the Father tells Him His house is ready for His bride, He will not come to steal, but to claim those who have accepted His betrothal and we are instructed to be ever ready, to have oil in our lamps as a thief...the element of surprise...not to destroy or rob and you have not offended me for the phrase is not mine, and I understand the enigma the phrase gives there's another message in scripture...He uses the foolish to confound the wise and the wise to confound the foolish, for in a mirror dimly do we see, but one day 'face to face' Thank you for your comment and this opportunity to explain what I understand of these elements of scripture, though I am probably the foolish trying to understand the wise |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
very interesting VAS. . . I found that you didn't really use the line in a cliche manner here. . . for one surely could have not thought about using it in the way that you have. . . well met. . . and an excellent poem as well. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
touché |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i read and im glad i asked, VAS and i especially like the scripture about the foolish confounding the wise and likewise |
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