Poetical dreaming - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

0 posted 2001-05-17 07:58 PM

                       You captivate me
                       moving me
                       from mortal plane
                       to something more
                       divine

                       If I could dare touch you
                       would the fantasy end
                       or merely
                       a climax to our little
                       starlit rendezvous

                       A thousands words
                       have I penned
                       with you in mind
                       and still have more still
                       waiting to be born

                       On this spring eve
                       pausing from writing
                       to see a falling star
                       and as it touches earth
                       I swear I feel your
                       gentle kiss

                       Oh my beautiful dream
                       may you never
                       leave my soul
                       Even so
                       my pen will always remember.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2001-05-17 07:59 PM

Your pen will always remembe. Very good. Joyce

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-05-17 08:04 PM

Brad, this is gorgeous!

SEA

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2001-05-17 08:10 PM

perhaps one change, to:

quote:
A thousands words
have I penned
with you in mind
and, yet, have more still
waiting to be born

but doesn't for a moment take away the context of this piece...well done Sir...

Cheryl Flemming
Member

since 2000-09-14

Posts 102

4 posted 2001-05-17 08:11 PM

This is beautiful.Really captivates you from the start

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

5 posted 2001-05-17 08:54 PM

Brad,

Very romantic writing

made me sigh

. By the way, since I don't think I've said it to you yet... welcome to Passions

TaraB

sigheyes
Member

since 2001-04-25

Posts 323
the winds of destiny

6 posted 2001-05-17 09:21 PM

Beautiful dreaming Brad, and welcome to passions.

thepoeticplumber
Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 185

7 posted 2001-05-17 10:27 PM

This certainly is a fine piece of writing.
The flow moved so smoothly. And also. It's good to see you on another forum Brad (D). You are one fine poet. Roger

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

8 posted 2001-05-17 11:59 PM

This was so beautiful Brad and I enjoyed it very much. Thank you......Sue

Suetang

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

9 posted 2001-05-18 12:07 PM

Thank you

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.