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RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

0 posted 2001-05-17 12:04 PM

Taking Care

If I come lightly to your heart,
As though a child
Upon the ice,
To pause
And kneel
And through your thin, cool surface
Feel
The pulse of winter;
If I can trust,
Will you not dare
A solemn promise
Not to break?

RMW

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2001-05-17 12:13 PM

oh how gingerly we may step when we deem much is at stake

read this twice, love the feel of it, got the message better the 2nd time, I think

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

2 posted 2001-05-17 09:25 AM

The innocence of this loves touches me...the style flows easily.

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

3 posted 2001-05-17 09:33 AM

should thee feel
through the thin
a winter's beat
that lies within
would thou warm
this heart of mine
with but word lain
in a single line...

Excellent!

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

4 posted 2001-05-17 09:36 AM

very nice...so tender.....love the presentation of this....it adds so much to the feeling you portray

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

5 posted 2001-05-17 09:49 AM

Virginia...yes, indeed. Thank you. Bob

JLR...always a pleasure to read your thoughtful comments. Thank you. Bob

Decaflame....for taking a moment to "return verse"...thanks...that's nice. Bob

Jellybeans.....it always feels a little special to read words of appreciation from you. Thank you. Bob

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

6 posted 2001-05-17 02:48 PM

Taking care with that heart, Bob. Lovely work.

Corinne

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

7 posted 2001-05-18 05:09 PM

Bravo, Bob! I love the symbolism you use!

Write on!

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

8 posted 2001-05-19 08:44 AM

Robere, this is beautiful!

~Tier

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2001-05-22 09:44 PM

Bob--this gave me goose bumps...not from the ice..but the fragile feel of a heart. Wonderful!

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