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Anson Beau Cavell
Junior Member

since 2001-05-12

Posts 49
Ohio,US

0 posted 2001-05-16 01:52 PM

They dodder in and out
incessantly, the elderly, brimming
smells of stale coffee.

These are groping places
for patchworks of stuffed men.

A place to hang out 'till it's time to go.

Fictitious flora clings,
desperately attached to the ceiling,
it reminds me of my grandmother's
hair,
always appearing fresh,
yet always in danger of falling
off.

Muzak mimics Madonna’s "Get into the groove"
cruel irony at it's best.

My waitress is blonde,
pretty and tall.
She brings the wrong check.
I wonder at the secret meaning,
yet find none.

I sit with my daughter
coloring,
me with words,
and her with crayons.

killed my Buddha, killed my Christ
Killed my karma, paid the price

For 27 years I've carried the welt
Wie kleine ist deinige Welt?

[This message has been edited by Anson Beau Cavell (edited 05-18-2001).]

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2001-05-16 01:55 PM

Yanno - I found this very sad, as I am currently going through a period of adjustment with a friend in a long term care facility, and related it to that. It is funny how plastic their world is (after a stroke, etc.) compared to only the week before and somehow they don't seem to mind, it is our "stuff"! Nice job on this.

~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~

Homepage: http://www.mysteria-poetry.cityslide.com/contents/contents.cfm/451673]

Panne447
Member

since 2001-04-03

Posts 196
S.A. TX

2 posted 2001-05-16 02:58 PM

Anson, I am too touched by this to even want to critique the poetry of it. I just want to say this was a very enjoyable and heart pulling read. Hope to come across it again when in a more critical mood but for now let me say your title intrigued me and is what brought me in and am so glad it did. Panne

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

3 posted 2001-05-16 03:14 PM

While this could be viewed as sad, I see it as your opportunity to continue coloring not only the words you share with your daughter, but our eyesight with your gift of poetry.

A splendid write. And yes, I see your comments as to critiquing, so all I can say is, I wish I had written this! I have not caught your first post here, so a belated WELCOME to Passions!

For me, this is a keeper, and I'm popping it into my library as of NOW!

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

4 posted 2001-05-16 04:52 PM

i am just a cheerleader and i pick out what i like yuh your imagery rules o yuh

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

5 posted 2001-05-16 05:10 PM

Anson...I really think this is really good. Bob

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