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Into The Blue |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
As the stars fall from the sky Down upon the blue and silent world I wipe the sleep from my eye, I don’t know the reason why, All the memories are of that girl Every sight and sound, taste and touch Comes cascading through a thickening haze Everything that ever meant so much Every dream of senseless things and such Forever seen through these nights and days And if I ever dared to see Those things which I try to hide All I ever was and all I ever longed to be Is now coming back to me A part I thought had finally died Into the blue I fall into No rhyme nor reason No change of season Into the blue |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
sometimes you think you will never forget someone but time has a way of dulling the senses..this is sad |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Sometimes to relish the moments of deja vu are a gift.... other times, it's worse than sandpaper going against the grain.... a good write, a good read.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Every sight and sound, taste and touch Comes cascading through a thickening haze Everything that ever meant so much Every dream of senseless things and such Forever seen through these nights and days And if I ever dared to see Those things which I try to hide All I ever was and all I ever longed to be Is now coming back to me A part I thought had finally died ================================ somethings get under our skin, and stay. The emote of angst in this is well conveyed and then felt by your phrases and comparisons... and also noted and enjoyed was the very cool/clever rhyme scheme and its superb cadence flow. Your talent for rhyme always impresses this reader. (theres always a reason for rhyme) *S* tis never easy being a moth, |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
.........wow.......... it's like you know what I'm feeling.....( spooky  ) Really, this is wonderful!  SEA |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I've found that it's best to just write it out, and then throw it out. . . excellent PK, you communicated the feelings well. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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