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SEA
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0 posted 2001-05-15 06:15 PM


With a sassy sway
from her hips
she walked away
with a smile on her lips

She didn't need to look back
to know you were staring after
watching her, your jaw slack
not believing her quiet laughter

One of soft heart, so gentle and kind
wasn't one you could decieve
so she left you behind
yet you just can't believe

Not one glance back
over her shoulder
shows that you lack
what it took to hold her


~SEA~

* just messin around...no personal meaning here.....  

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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2001-05-15 06:17 PM


Hey Sea, this is a great "messin around"  

liked the last stanza  

Maree

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Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2001-05-15 06:44 PM


SEA~
I REALLY like this !
Sassy n' cute !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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3 posted 2001-05-15 06:55 PM


enjoy
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4 posted 2001-05-15 07:27 PM


pretty good one there sea!  aint it fun to just "mess around" sometimes....*snicker*

hugs, g

"...if i ran away,
i'd never have the strength
to go very far..."  

Brad Majors
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5 posted 2001-05-15 08:08 PM


Awesome piece!
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6 posted 2001-05-15 09:40 PM


I LOVE it when you mess around...or, at least, I would  
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7 posted 2001-05-15 09:47 PM


I could see it all...and the last paragragh wrapped it together incredibly!
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8 posted 2001-05-15 09:47 PM


Left in the dust.  This is my first comment on this forum.  Very enjoyable.  Roger


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9 posted 2001-05-15 10:16 PM


i found this quite emotionally real and heavy......

sometimes people know when it's time to say goodbye....

nicely done

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10 posted 2001-05-15 10:19 PM


You may not be messing around....but you write well when you're not...

excellent...

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11 posted 2001-05-15 10:25 PM


SEA,

   When I came in here I expected a sad poem.. but I sheesh was I wrong!  I liked this one   it made me chuckle   Well written.



TaraB

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SEA
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12 posted 2001-05-15 11:22 PM


Maree~ thanks   this one was fun  

Marge~ sassy...is always good   thank you  

Vandana~ glad you liked  

Dg~ yes...thanks  

Brad~ wow, thank you  

Balladeer~ yes....   you would   ( lol) thanks  

JLR~ thank you very much  

Roger~ I'm so happy to be your first reply   thank you  

Doreen~thank you for that  

Sunshine~ thank you  

RP~ glad to make you laugh...it was in fun...thank you  


~SEA

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Lighthousebob
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13 posted 2001-05-15 11:46 PM


.........sassy. (not zesty!  -Taco Bell)

I see it everyday.

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