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snowpants
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0 posted 2001-05-15 04:51 PM




resonant cobalt through unpretentious branches of ardor
seep into my eyes, adding to the memory of sunup,
now hours behind us...
visions of green beneath our dream-filled heads
exemplify the sparkle in the animated imagination,
just within our reach...

subtle sights of marigold surrounding our joined hands
illuminate the spirit revealed in the fluency of our dialogue,
encasing us in this promise made in the presence of unborn stars...
enigmatic journey of butterflies across our unobstructed view
rejuvenate the love we have found in this gift of time,
surrounding us like the violet grace of wildflowers...

incomparable rays of sunlight, melting any remaining silences,
bring an unspeakable warmth to the words now spoken,
reinforcing the significance of the encompassing air above...
expectant lyrics carving our joined names in the sky
eliminate the doubt of our formerly indefinite fate,
giving to me the peace which eluded my grasp for so long...

-kh 05/14/01

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

© Copyright 2001 snowpants - All Rights Reserved
latin passion
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since 2001-04-26
Posts 576

1 posted 2001-05-15 05:27 PM


Heard and understood. So beautfully stated,All that is missing is Ms. Lavender. Love it/ya.

From the heart - sincerity. Where you go I follow.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-05-15 05:43 PM


exemplify the sparkle in the animated imagination,
just within our reach...
===========================
illuminate the spirit revealed in the fluency of our dialogue,
encasing us in this promise made in the presence of unborn stars...
enigmatic journey of butterflies across our unobstructed view
=========================

incomparable rays of sunlight, melting any remaining silences,
bring an unspeakable warmth to the words now spoken,
reinforcing the significance of the encompassing air above...
expectant lyrics carving our joined names in the sky
=====================

what a very cool pic...
and what a VERY COOL poem,
talk about imagery and verbiage overload!!
you sated the reader of both in this girl
there are so many cool and unique lines and phrases in this...
I feel like I been dipped in a dictionary and then rolled in Eden.
Like a scene in that movie "What Dreams May  Come"
where they are transported into a Monet like painting of color.
very well done poetess snowdockers *L*
(rhyme? we dont need no stinkin rhyme)    
(and I'll deny saying that)   LOL

tis never easy being a moth,
tis not easy being the flame.
what some never see is--
sometimes ... most times ...
they are one in the same.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-05-15 08:40 PM


forgot to put this gem in me library...
and teach who was just read this has something to say...

Dear Snorepants...just how many languages do you expect this cowboy to learn.
Here I am trying to learn Cherokee and now you want me to try and learn English too?  

In all seriousness, this is a remarkable unification of wisdom, insight and growth, all patched together in a quilt of nature's beauty and penned with a very powerful use of vocabulary.
I am so impressed that we wont even mention the first place and the last place teams on the diamond!!!!    
I made JM read this to me twice so that I could fully inhale the essence of this superb free verse.
Teach gives ya an A++
take care Powderpanties.  
==========================

(he forgot about the rhyme) hehehehe  

we got the puter power!!!!  
even if he did do the baseball BLAH BLAH  

tis never easy being a moth,
tis not easy being the flame.
what some never see is--
sometimes ... most times ...
they are one in the same.

snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
4 posted 2001-05-16 06:38 PM


lp:  thank you!  I am glad you liked it!  

JM:  nope...don't need rhyme...hehe...fantastic reply, though...thanks so much!  you always have the best compliments!!  

JM/Teach:  snorepants???  um...sherr...whatEVER!     seriously, thank you, m'friend for your reply...tell ya what...I'll teach you English if you teach me Cherokee...   ooooh...hehe..as for the baseball comment...ANYway...you talk in SUCH circles...talk to ya later, m'friend, and hurry back, ya hear??  

sp  

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

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