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A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

0 posted 2001-05-15 09:13 AM

You could extend your hand to mine
and know that in my heart, I have placed
a love for you beyond the reach
of isolation’s grasp

dare we envision a covenant without fear or
disquiet of familiar abandon

if only we were to hold true to our hearts
without concern, we could revel in reality, the dream
we have the courage…only to speak of.

Annie Lehberg
achildsheart
05-14-01

May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat...

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

1 posted 2001-05-15 09:42 AM

Indeed, hold true to your heart....

INclan
Senior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

2 posted 2001-05-15 09:50 AM

Annie,

I really enjoyed your posting. I had to read it several times to discover the flow of the piece. Indeed, if only we all possessed the courage to revel in reality. You might consider modifying the line structure or punctuation, for clarity.

Well done!

INclan

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

3 posted 2001-05-15 10:25 AM

always, we must be true to our hearts. Well done. *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

GrapesRMine
Junior Member

since 2001-05-13

Posts 13

4 posted 2001-05-15 10:51 AM

I love this line in particular:

"...I have placed
a love for you beyond the reach
of isolation’s grasp"

Few people have the courage to speak of dreams or reality, but you speak of "both and." Thank you for this.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-05-15 05:39 PM

we do. . . and this poem lets us. . .

wonderful. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Coal Surrender
Member

since 2001-04-01

Posts 84
U.S.

6 posted 2001-05-16 06:22 AM

Your words reach out, as a candle whose flame longs for gentle eyes to linger in its sway.

Coal

[This message has been edited by Coal Surrender (edited 05-16-2001).]

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