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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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You, are...too, thin, my father. Dad? You are too thin. I wish I could take life of you into me, spit it out, renewed-- and have you stand up strong again... You. My Dad. The Strongest Man. (I'll keep you from that curse...) Me. (I'm BAD.) much stronger than... (I'll be your burly nurse...) I won't let them take you--NO. I won't ever let you go... I raise my fist unto the skies... (like God has never seen one cry...?) and still you whisper, "dignity" as if, that ever was in me... My Father? You are much too thin-- this time? I shelter YOU from wind. all the fear that we disguise-- the blanket of a daily lie-- a look of truth unmet in eyes-- I try to feed you once again. Oh daddy...please? Smile once again through lips that are much too thin-- hold me tight through this dark night tell me all will be alright that there will be a sheltered lee-- against the wind, you'll wait for me. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sigh...oh hon...if I could offer some of me you know I would dont you? |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
The cycle turns and we within it child father to the man father child to the man seasons mark us lead us harvest time planting eyes moonlight fades with dawns reprise as memories given down remain the human rain quenching nourishing all It is a thing we all know or will be educated on. Take heart, in your heart. You can offer him no other place so safe. Be Well AT |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh hon, ((((((((((sending Love to You and your Dad)))))))))) Maree [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 05-15-2001).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
(((hugs))) to you, my friend Take Care, Regards, Sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Serenity ... the emotions this elicited were very powerful indeed. Beautifully written, and wonderful phrasing. Many hugs to you for this heart-felt read this morning!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Serenity, it was only 3years ago or so I was saying the same thing...he was too thin..and I tried to get him to eat anything despite whether it was good for him or not..knowing that anything was better than nothing and if he enjoyed it's taste and it put a smile on his face..then it was worth it..for I knew that no matter...it would soon be the last thing he tasted of life... ((huggssss))and keep that smile on your face, even though it is hard to do..it will bring him pleasure Maureen "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
it's wonderful to have a father you can write about this way, I envy you......bless you. Kathleen |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You've brought up some memories....and while they are sad, I still thank you for this.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and still you whisper, "dignity" as if, that ever was in me... My Father? You are much too thin-- this time? I shelter YOU from wind. ================================ Oh daddy...please? Smile once again through lips that are much too thin-- hold me tight through this dark night tell me all will be alright that there will be a sheltered lee-- against the wind, you'll wait for me. ============================ "and still you whisper, "dignity" as if, that ever was in me..." it IS in you .. and so is the strength... and HE sees it in you... now see you thru his eyes... that is the best gift you can give him...and he to you. hugs baby.  metis never easy being a moth, |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
You whisper truth in dignity That is the only blanket Against what the world might see Some may call him weak- Some may call him strong But in the end its all a part of loves simple song If I had the choice Much strength I would bequeath Strength to stand strong And to cry if need be I wish you peace And the knowledge You are always loved -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Serenity: Please know you are not alone. There are many out there who care and love you! Turn to them if you need to:-)! Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
hey....you guys are beautiful...and I'm okay, and he's amazing. Some days he looks awful, and then the next day he'll be gardening. I am the one cracking up, I think. But wanted to thank you all---especially you, Kathleen---you are right. I am VERY LUCKY. Thanks again, sorry I'm not replying as I used to---I do not like to tie up the phone so much anymore. But a million hugs to you all (I really AM very lucky!) Thank you all. |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
you should write a book and publish it you are that good, i'm so impressed with you talent, that good be a dramatic song, always charming my thoughts and making them feel the words. thank you kindly |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my, how I relate to this, I see my Grandmother, at age 94, some days so like herself, and others, just a shadow remains. I hope your Dad is ok, and you take care. Very excellent discussion here, of a subject so sad and so real. Sandra |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
hugs and love.....I have not been to this place, my parents are both alive, but I do not know my dad at all, you must look to the wonderful times that you have in mememory, and count yourself lucky for having such a dad...... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You brought back some painful memories for me, and all I can give you today is a hug, and I hope it helps some, and just keep loving him as you do now, that is all the food he really wants. ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You have really touched some love and caring...wonderful expression of your feelings for your dad...James |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Serenity, A simply powerful poem. You brought a lump to my throat just thinking of my father. We all know that the day will come, even though we force the thoughts from our mind. Now I have to go call my dad and tell him how much I love him Hugs to you.TaraB |
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Secret Whisper Member
since 2001-01-25
Posts 298Through the Looking Glass |
Simply Marvelous. "What I was living, the same am I now, dead." --Capaneus, THE INFERNO |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
you are both very lucky, I believe. This is awesome writing, serene one... |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
serenity, I can see you trying to get your dad all kinds of goodies! As a care giver, that is one thing we can have fun with. Love him, hug him and talk and listen to him. My prayers are with you both. ME |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
serenity You touched my heart with this piece. This was me two years ago and I could feel how deep your pain and wish there were some words of comfort I could give you. Just know that I'm here for you always if ever you need me. Take care......love Sue. Suetang |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I will take every prayer. Every offering. He told me at Christmas...every day is a gift...I believe him now. He also told me yesterday? "You damned people (his children) have been burying me every year---I wish you would cut that out!" He's amazing. Hugging myself. |
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