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He Wed....She Wed ........Kit McCallum & Balladeer
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He Wed....She Wed ........Kit McCallum & Balladeer |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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With all the preparations that had built up to this day, The plans, the lists, the chaos; all decisions under-way; It came to this, the final hour, when all was said and done, The last defining moments of her single life as one. The bridesmaids chattered endlessly, fluffed up her gown and veil, One commented, "My dear, you should sit down, you're looking pale." She needed time to think, and asked them all to leave the room, And heard one say on exiting . "Has someone seen the groom?" The groom was busy wrestling with a tie around his neck Hands shaking, sweating like a monk, he was a nervous wreck! Reality was setting in...the day had finally come To say goodbye to moments of a carefree, single bum. What happened here? He did not know! One minute he was free Cavorting in his bachelorhood, as happy as could be And then one day he fell in love which now had led him here Staring at a penguin staring right back from the mirror! "Has someone seen the groom?" began to echo through her ears, Now why would they have said that? She recanted through her fears; Perhaps he wouldn't show, and leave her standing in the aisle . While waiting for him alter bound, as he skipped town in style?! She paced the floor and wrung her hands, for did she really know, The man she was about to join, just moment's left to go? Perhaps she should have let her father "do" that background check, But she had laughed it off, oh my . she really was a wreck! "It seems like only yesterday..", he thought, "I asked to date her Now here I stand, hands shaking, like a Roman gladiator! The crowd is outside cheering as I take a final breath All knowing that this soldier is about to meet his death!!!" "Oh, no!", he thought, "That is not true. It isn't death - but life! I love the girl with all my heart...I WANT her for my wife! She'll give me love and happiness and share my joy and more.. (So why is it, within my mind, I hear the lions roar?)" Her father tapped upon the door, and asked to join her then, She paused a moment, "Get a grip!" she whispered from within, "Come on in dad." she answered, as he walked in through the door, The second that she saw him, all the tears began to pour. He smiled and took her in his arms, his little girl all grown, "He'll be here soon." he comforted, (or else I'll break his bones!)" He tipped her chin to look at him, and said "What do you think?" "I've got the car out back if you should change your mind." he winked. He heard a knock and there stood Bob, his best man, at the door His eyes still bloodshot from the bachelor gig the night before. "It's time", he said, "to make the female population cry. Not every day one gets to see a living legend die!" "The church is filled. The music's playing. Flowers are everywhere. Your sister looks ridiculous with sparkles in her hair So let's go, pal. It's time to rock and roll and wed your bride Unless, of course, you're smart enough to run somewhere and hide!!!! She smiled up at her father, to the man she so adored, He brushed away a final tear, from both their eyes once more; She took a breath and nodded . to the door they walked ahead, And took her place in line behind the bridesmaids, to be wed. The organ music echoed through the great cathedral walls, The girls began their graceful walk, but she just froze and stalled; She grabbed a little tighter, to her father's strong embrace, Looked down the aisle until she saw her love's familiar face. He stood there, tugging at his collar, swaying side to side, Then heard the whispers from the front row.."Look! Here comes the bride!" He wheeled and looked and felt his face take on a growing smile The most beautiful woman in the world was walking down the aisle. Her father placed her hand in his and gave a silent nod And so they stood, exchanging vows before mankind and God All doubts and fears now disappeared as she became his wife And, two as one, they now moved on toward a brand new life.... [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 05-14-2001).] |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Simply magnificent. Well done Kit and Mike. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is as it should be...forever and ever...simply beautiful |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Oh, how awesome! I loved this!  Sauni Sauni :) |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
STOP!!!! stop!!!! This is not how the story will end. Let me assure you of this!!!! Do you want the reality or the fanasty version? which will it be - I say this respectfully. I will NOT put certain parties to the "test" to stand up for me - I can do that alone if need be. To be quite honest I'm not a good map reader - and that is the truth!!! For those who believed in me -May God keep you. There is no fear in love..For perfect love casth out all fear. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kit and Balladeer~ Just so lovely ... you both did a marvelous job on this. The flow was excellent ... melding perfectly. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Really, really nice. And they lived happily everafter. Joyce |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is ADORABLE... you guys write so well together... your style compliments each other so well and you did this that sweet sense of humor we adore in both of you so... you took us in PERFECT cadence thru all the many emotions that one would go thru on this day.. and you showed it cleverly thru both sides ponit of view. Loved the guys last minute jitters..lol very cool and cute ... well done poetess and poet of cadence cool  Did you make it to the Milky Way, |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
A marvelous write, a wonderful read! Well done to both of you! Brought back many memories! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Great job, wonderful read...I enjoyed this so much! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Woohooo!!! *applause* Excellent working together you two! BRAVO!!!!!! Wow! You did a magnificent job telling the story of how nervous everyone gets! LOL Excellent!! |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Oh how I remember the feelings running through me just before walking down the aisle. The two of you portrayed both sides just great. Enjoyed the excitment through out the whole poem. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is fabulous, just fabulous! Congratulations on a wonderful collaboration. Kathleen Blake |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I have to love this....although I'm sure mine will be a bit different...right now I'm in an argument with my sister and future mother-in-law because THIS bride steadfastly refuses to wear SHOES!!! rofl...OMG...another sister accused me of trying to kill my father---she said one look at me in the "gown" I picked out and he was going to die laughing! HAS ANYONE EVER BROUGHT THEIR FATHER ALONG WHEN THEY ELOPED? OMG...(serenity exits...trying to take deep breaths...) Loved the poem you two...but now MY nerves are shot! |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
Cute cute cute (Didnt even realize it was two writers until i looked at the title your writing style really blendsTime flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
EXCEPTIONALLY AMAZING!!!!!!! regards to the both of you, Sudhir |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Magnificently melded poetic perfection... I loved every word of every line!!! *S* Great job... my applause to two incredible talents! |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Sharon: Thanks so much for the kind words Sharon, we had a lot of fun with this one, Michael was keeping me in stitches with every verse, LOL! ~Paula: Although the nerves can be terror, this one did end "as it should" ... thank you for enjoying Paula! ~Saunni: So glad you loved this one Saunni, we very much appreciate the wonderful thoughts! ~Latin Passion: Thank you for your enthusiastic response Latin Passion, though I'm not sure what you meant there. It's all fantasy ... no need to take it seriously ... we didn't, LOL. ~Marge: We had a great time writing it Marge. Michael had me laughing everytime I got a verse back. Thank you so much for the lovely sentiments, I'm glad it came across well! ~Joyce: Well, happily ever after has yet to be seen, LOL - maybe there's a sequal in here somewhere? I'm glad you enjoyed Joyce, thank you! ~Janet Marie: ROFL, from penguins to gladiators JM ... I loved those parts too! Thanks so much for all these sweet words, you know I love ya, and really appreciate you! ~Decaflame: Brought back a few memories for me too Decaflame, though I left out the part about my dad giving me half a valium, LOL ... thank you for the kind words! ~Martie: I'm so glad you enjoyed Martie ... It was a really fun write, thanks for the lovely response, much appreciated! ~Rebecca: Thank you so much Becky! Michael's got a great imagination, and a joy to write with, we had a lot of fun with this, glad it came across well! ~Inot2b: It brought back lots of memories for me too Inot2b, I'm happy it brought back some fun ones for you too, very grateful you enjoyed! ~Kathleen: Thank you for the wonderful response Kathleen, it was always a treat waiting to see what Michael would come back with next, LOL. Much appreciated! ~Serenity: ROFL!!!! No shoes???  Ah Serenity ... thank you for the grins. My goodness, you're dad's really in for it, LOL. This was great, I want pictures! ~Cuddlez: What a wonderful thing to say Cuddlez! That's exactly what we hope for when we're writing a duet, to have it feel seemless. This is a wonderful thing to hear, thank you! ~Sudhir: EXCEPTIONALLY wonderful to see your regards here again Sudhir, you have been missed! Thank you for the lovely thoughts! ~Suthern: *Smiling* Thanks so much Suthern, it's always so great to read your responses, I'm so very glad you enjoyed this one, Thank you! And thank you Michael, it was a pleasure as always sweet poet. You had me laughing from the get-go. You're an amazing writer, this was such fun. Maybe there's a sequal here somewhere, LOL? Much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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Temptress
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I could say that this is excellent teamwork and writing, but my words would not be enough. You two are amazing. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Fantastic job, you two! I enjoyed this very much! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
It was hard to tell if she wrote or he wrote, but I will tell you one thing, you have to do another one! I laughed all the way through this, right down to getting the sparkles in the sister's hair (you guys don't miss a trick!). Absolutely fabulous collaboration you two, bravo! ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, I double JM. Wonderful write. |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Temptress: Your words were "more" than enough Temptress ... thank you so very much! ~Denise: Very happy you enjoyed this little bundle of nerves Denise ... much appreciation to you! ~Mysteria: LOL, I loved that line too Mysteria, thank you for the wonderful comment. This is actually the third duet we've done, and I do hope we'll get a chance to do some more, we have a lot of fun! ~Seymour: Thanks so much Seymour ... how about we double the "thank-you", very grateful you enjoyed! Much appreciation to all, /Kit & Michael ... hello? Michael, LOL! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Absolutely!!!! HELLO!! My thanks also to you all...I simply sit in the background, allowing Kit to do all the talking, as a newlywed hubby is supposed to do! I appreciate you all! Kit, let's duet again!!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
What a wonderful story, and a great collaboration. Much enjoyed. Sandra |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
what a fabulous duet, you two are amazing poets....great work. (((hugs)) Charisma |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I waited to read this...I knew it would make me cry...it did... you two.....this is wonderful!! SEA |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Sandra: Thanks so much Sandra, very glad you enjoyed! ~Charisma: Many thanks for the kind words Charisma, much appreciation! ~SEA: Sorry for the cry Susan, but I'm glad you enjoyed it through the tears! (and ROFL @ Michael ... type a lot, yes ... but talk a lot, nah. Let's duet again! Much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
’Deer dearest heart Kit darling girl again a perfect marriage of words, I love this it is utterly utterly excellent. The truth of this is soooooooo real, I had all this with Emma last year, hers didn’t end so happily, it was indeed the wedding from hell. And I might add it cost a fortune Krissy could give you chapter and verse on being a bridesmaid…… This is superb writing meshed with complete artistry   I wub you too Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hey, Kit and Michael,  I love this. I thought I'd reply in case ya'll happen to ever look back here...lol "Love makes the world go around" |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
LOL! We always look....and thank you for enjoying! |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Balladeer and Kit this is very wonderful!!!! Enjoyed!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you, Bridgette! |
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