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Open Poetry #13

ablutions [senryu]

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

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0 posted 2001-05-12 07:47 AM

ablutions

palms warming lotion
scent of rosewater rising
hands silkening limbs

tortoise shell comb teeth
draw through tresses golden-red
a faint smile appears

she greets the sunrise
sends a welcome on the wind
lights the day with love

latin passion
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since 2001-04-26

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1 posted 2001-05-12 05:02 PM

Good morning to you! love the shared meaning element you created. LP

For those who believed in me -May God keep you. There is no fear in love..For perfect love casth out all fear.

Irish Rose
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2 posted 2001-05-12 06:51 PM

I like the rich imagery in this one very much.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

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3 posted 2001-05-14 04:14 PM

Latin, Irish, thank you both for coming in to read. I appreciate your comments.

Wilfred Yeats
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4 posted 2001-05-15 10:30 AM

Absolutions - are great - but you haveto die to know if the giver was effective
Ablutions - I'm ready any time - to give or to take ~~A~~

Beautiful LiW

Mysteria

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5 posted 2001-05-15 10:44 AM

Loved the last stanza and the play with words! Bet she was squeaky clean too?

~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~

Homepage: http://www.mysteria-poetry.cityslide.com/contents/contents.cfm/451673]

Lady In White

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6 posted 2001-05-15 12:15 PM

Mr. Yeats, Mysteria, thank you both for taking a moment to read. I do appreciate your comments.

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