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nakdthoughts
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0 posted 2001-05-12 07:11 AM



Sounds of Senry..You

Awakening sounds
Songs of morning tempting me
Lifting the night's gloom.

Remnants before me
In need of piecing comfort
Day quilting in you.

Laid out in advance
Moments of escape, playing
Into your echoes.


~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II


[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 05-12-2001).]

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Charisma
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1 posted 2001-05-12 07:30 AM


beautiful senryus....love these serie of your wonderful thoughts.

Charisma

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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2001-05-12 08:21 AM


A lovely piece, and perhaps, change quilting [count two] to quilts [count one] would work?
Just a suggestion...

but your thoughts?  Wonderful!

latin passion
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3 posted 2001-05-12 09:54 AM


A beautiful pattern you've designed.
Lady Ollyne
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4 posted 2001-05-12 10:47 AM


enjoyed...the echoes

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inot2B
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5 posted 2001-05-12 10:53 AM


"Remnants before me
In need of piecing comfort
Day quilting in you."


Loved these lines.
Your answers are also intriguing.

VAS
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6 posted 2001-05-12 11:10 AM


Love it, the "day quilting" line is most fascinating, descriptive!  Punny title, giggle.
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