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The Act of Substitution ("assignment ")
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The Act of Substitution ("assignment ") |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
 endless rolling of contemplations ashore... I never feared quite so dreadfully this surge. the incessant onslaught of trial and error... I never imagined my soul could endure this purge. the blazing heat from beyond the only sky I've known... spiraling disorientation steers me further from home. the torrent of confusion into which I'm thrown... how could I have dreamed so far I'd have to roam? hurriedly relenting gusts of wind establish cessation... shimmers of your essence materialize before my eyes. the hands of time stopped for my alleviation... cobalt verses resume their indelibly written cries. the falling of the vanity’s mighty reign... I can only surrender myself to your salvation. the conceding of this insufferable journey's pain... just the iridescence of your resilience could trigger this elation. -kh 05/11/01 *hey, JM and Teach...hope I've done ya proud!  to be with you... |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Applauding!!!!!!! Fantastic!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hurriedly relenting gusts of wind establish cessation... shimmers of your essence materialize before my eyes. the hands of time stopped for my alleviation... cobalt verses resume their indelibly written cries. the falling of the vanity’s mighty reign... I can only surrender myself to your salvation. the conceding of this insufferable journey's pain... just the iridescence of your resilience could trigger this elation. ========================== YOU ARE TOO COOL FOR SCHOOL!!!!  first of all I KNEW you would pick that pic second of all...you HOPE you did us proud??? the fact that you put up with us at all... gets you extra credit ROFLMAO Frosty-britches  ...I dont want to ever hear you say again you cant rhyme...not only did ya rhyme ...but ya did it with WAY COOL vocab choices, NO cliches' and awesome imagery to accent the powerfully expressed emote here. this is a very cool write SP... you've got some impressive lines here... Frog or not(hehe).. this sends ya to the Deans list *S* the challenge here is really for us... trying to find something you cant write well about... Hmmmm????? there is the matter of those Cards....NAHHHH... too hard to come up with rhymes for BLAH BLAH BLAH  I'll let ya know what teach says  excellent write K..truly. "Nature's first green is gold, |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Kris, this is just beautiful!  |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
This is great I love the way you have written it |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
JAW: why thanks! glad you enjoyed! JM: hey there...I am glad you guys, or, at least you, for now, approve! Haven't heard the Teach's input yet...  ...hehe...but, really, thank you so much for your thoughtful reply, and you knew I'd pick that one, eh?? They were all very cool...it was hard to choose, but that one was my favorite...this is fun, though! keeps the juices flowin', ya know?? thanks again, m'friend...Elizabeth: thanks! I'm happy you liked it!  Alan: thank you so much...I appreciate your reply! glad you enjoyed! sp  to be with you... |
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