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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 2001-05-11 04:04 PM


The leaves had collected on the ground
The wind had turned a cooler shade
Somehow there was a familiar sound
In every chorus Nature made

Freshest of air, sweetest of smell
Hoping to hold onto this moment in time
Keeping his silence, wanting to tell
All who would listen to his mind

With a new season, old season’s memory brings
Foretelling also future if dared to dream
Seeing this and many more things,
But the visions are never what they seem

What is Autumn if not a subconscious metaphor
A wake up call before the dead that is winter
His heart cries out like never before
Even as the trees crack, and splinter

Terrible though, that the knowledge is gained
That beginnings fade into endings twilight
And all that is achieved is somehow in vain
Like the quickening coming of Winter’s night

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Decaflame
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1 posted 2001-05-11 04:26 PM


Oh my, it is just come summer, and this brings winter to the fore....

well done, Sir!

nakdthoughts
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2 posted 2001-05-11 04:34 PM


Freshest of air, sweetest of smell
Hoping to hold onto this moment in time
Keeping his silence, wanting to tell
All who would listen to his mind...

you have some mind PK.. *s

~Wynter
p.s. all my nights are Wynter nights..teasin'

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



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3 posted 2001-05-11 10:45 PM


This feels so inviting......I don't know how to explain it....LOL I just love Autumn....that is my favorite time of year....very soothing to me. I liked this very much  
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4 posted 2001-05-11 11:40 PM


What is Autumn if not a subconscious metaphor
A wake up call before the dead that is winter
His heart cries out like never before
Even as the trees crack, and splinter

Terrible though, that the knowledge is gained
That beginnings fade into endings twilight
And all that is achieved is somehow in vain
Like the quickening coming of Winter’s night
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could those verses be any cooler?
could they have more cleverly done imagery and angst?
me thinks not...
and Im always listening to that poetic mind  

Did you make it to the Milky Way,
see the lights faded
that heaven is overrated
Did you fall for a shooting star
One without a permanent scar

Saunni
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5 posted 2001-05-12 03:51 PM


Totally cool! I loved this very much!  

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

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6 posted 2001-05-14 04:16 PM


This is quite lovely....
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7 posted 2001-05-14 07:40 PM


loved it
walker
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8 posted 2001-05-14 08:03 PM


Beautiful!
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