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Greeneyes
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0 posted 2001-05-08 09:32 PM




 


'Based on a true story when I was 'bout 15 years old'


It looked like

a battle zone

debris everywhere

the sky was still gray and a 

faint mist lay over the island

the wind had a 

slight pinch to it

and the sand looked 

like a ghost dancing 

over the beach

the sea had reclaimed it's 

memory and started a new 

a girl walks alone on the beach 

excited to find this new adventure 

the wall of rocks 

somehow looked different

they didn’t seem as 

strong as they

once had

laying across one was a 

piece from the ship

"trust----

down the beach a few 100 yards 

was the other half

worthy"

the houses

oh the houses

all of them

gone

that’s it

just gone 

I have never

seen an island

look so lonely

there was

nothing left

but the ocean,

the sand 

and the pillar of

rocks

as I walked along

something in the rocks

caught my eye

it was a

shell 

a beautiful shell that had withstood

the ravage of the sea




***


Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."



[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 05-08-2001).]

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Irish Rose
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1 posted 2001-05-08 10:09 PM


I love hearing about the sea.....thank you for this.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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2 posted 2001-05-08 10:19 PM


touching my heart here.......really this is wonderful    SEA
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3 posted 2001-05-08 11:23 PM


Shells are amazing gifts. Perhaps it is the environment in which we find them...as your poem suggests. They tell us about the hope for calm....what some have described as the possibility to "be still enough to have companionship with God." Thank you for sharing.  Bob
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4 posted 2001-05-09 01:52 AM


Lauren,

Most of my childhood was spent near the seashore and I remember well the storms and hurricanes that would wreak havoc on the coast.  I guess that's one of the things I like about the ocean.  Nothing is ever quite the same.  Each day there's a new beach without footprints.  Each hurricane season nature tends to take back a little of what belongs to her.  This poem brought it all back.  Such good writing here, my friend.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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5 posted 2001-05-09 02:00 AM


And this said to me...that even in the worst situations, if we look hard enough we can find something good?  Too deep?  Well I loved the poem even if I created the metaphor by accident.

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6 posted 2001-05-09 02:44 AM


GreenEyes~

'I have never

seen an island

look so lonely'


What a wonderful thought !
Enjoyed this stroll along your beaches of recall.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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7 posted 2001-05-09 01:11 PM


wonderful. . .  

reminding us that there's always something to take with us. . . the lesson. . .

wonderful Lauren. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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8 posted 2001-05-09 01:21 PM


Oh yes......poets are always fascinated by the sea, the power, and the unknown quality that lies within it's ageless being.  You spin a magic thread and capture that quality within your words, then share it with those of us who never seem to get enough of the sea. Thank you for this one...I love it!!!!

Live...Love...Be grateful for both!!
  
    

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9 posted 2001-05-09 02:08 PM


Irish Rose,

Thank you my friend....it was my pleasure  


SEA~

Good to see you back again.....   thank you for allowing this poem to touch your heart...  

RMW~

They indeed do tell us of the calms....thank you for visiting...  


Michael~

"Each day there's a new beach without footprints.  Each hurricane season nature tends to take back a little of what belongs to her" *** I must say I love how you stated that, such inspiration there...thank you for taking a look back with me...  


Mysteria~

Yes, just like the shells we can all survive any thing, I strongly believe that....thanks, and hugs to you...  


Marge~

It did look so lonely, even the rocks....but it has been renewed and just a lovely as it was before...thanks for strolling with me...


Sven~

every time I return, or leave the Oceans side I take something with me....thankyou my friend....I appreciate you...  

~

Sunnyone~
I appreciate you so much....thank you for responding as you have...I can never get enough of the sea...one day I will live there, and it wont matter which Ocean I live on....HUGS to you....


Hugs to
all


Greeneyes~




***




Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."



[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 05-09-2001).]

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10 posted 2001-05-09 02:25 PM


A shell of hope, brought through the turmoil, very lovely read.
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11 posted 2001-05-10 04:33 PM


Gemini~


Thank you for stopping by to read...


Greeneyes~


***

Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."


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