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Michael G
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since 2000-06-25
Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2001-05-08 06:58 PM


What prays my small begining
to fail upon the shores
of life's ever present
dangers that take hold.
Of the night I held you
so close, no seperation
of heat that tangled us
into the eyes of resignation.
The days turn to months
soon its a year
of still feeling you inside
and not having you here.
For the rage still comes
tearing at me
like I was
so understated.
Those days
we keep inside
those times we kissed
and felt no danger.
I wish for your touch
to take away my pain
the one that threatens me
is my heart still torn in two.
And the night
still calls to me
like the road before
so unending.
My time is coming
close to start
again my
seperate journey.
As the shore comes to me
the sand fails my wieght
I sink into heaven
and drift upon the waves,
that flower my own past
to the shadows of triumphs
that anger could not save
your eyes become my star.......

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Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

1 posted 2001-05-08 09:13 PM


Oh Lord, I cried so hard after reading this, the words..the feelings, the meaning...everything.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
2 posted 2001-05-08 09:19 PM


Quite the moving piece, Michael...very nicely written!  I love this...

sp  

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

Marina
Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario
3 posted 2001-05-08 09:36 PM


=============================================The days turn to months
soon its a year
of still feeling you inside
and not having you here.
=============================================

I love these lines.  I found them very easy and fimiliar to relate too.  This is one of your best Michael.  One that belongs in my Library for sure.  

Although I would have to agree with Kathleen and Snowpants, a  very moving piece.  But  then you always do write with your heart on your sleeve.

Love
Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-05-09 09:40 PM


Of the night I held you
so close, no seperation
of heat that tangled us
into the eyes of resignation.
The days turn to months
soon its a year
of still feeling you inside
and not having you here.
For the rage still comes
tearing at me
like I was
so understated.
Those days
we keep inside
those times we kissed
and felt no danger.
I wish for your touch
to take away my pain
the one that threatens me
is my heart still torn in two.
And the night
still calls to me
like the road before
so unending.
My time is coming
close to start
again my
seperate journey.
As the shore comes to me
the sand fails my wieght
I sink into heaven
and drift upon the waves,
that flower my own past
to the shadows of triumphs
that anger could not save
your eyes become my star.......
====================================

oh Michael ... this is so damn beautiful,
this is classic MG poetry..
the perfect example to show what made me fall for your poetry nearly a year ago...on first read.
the depth...the longing, the intensity of the expression...
the impact of the emotions
I felt every line of this.
my how I have missed reading you
take care poet of soul(and wind)  

"Nature's first green is gold,
Her hardest hue to hold." ...
"So dawn goes down to day,
Nothing gold can stay."
~Frost~

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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind
5 posted 2001-05-10 08:22 AM


I sink into heaven
and drift upon the waves,
that flower my own past
to the shadows of triumphs
that anger could not save
your eyes become my star"

MichaelG~

JM directed me to this piece of poetry...I am speechless after reading it....the whole poem touched me, the last verse grabbed my heart...thank you for sharing such a sad, but ever so beautiful piece....


Greeneyes~


***

Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."


vandana
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Member Patricius
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463
USA
6 posted 2001-05-10 10:50 AM


nice
Marina
Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario
7 posted 2001-05-10 12:10 PM


JM, you go girl!!!      You just go speading around the word what an amazing poet he is and maybe he will believe SOMEBODY!!  


On another thought....How about those KIngs HUH???  


Me


Parker
Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129
ON
8 posted 2001-05-10 12:49 PM


a big wow on this one... thanks for the mood change I needed it to write.  

Parker

dgvarner
Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
9 posted 2001-05-10 01:06 PM


...we keep inside
those times we kissed
and felt no danger.
I wish for your touch
to take away my pain...
=====================================
very nice poem..  Parker brought me here..  

have read this one a few times now..and get a little more out of it each time..    
i think it has a little of each of us weaved within it..from some time or another..

hugs, g

"...if i ran away,
i'd never have the strength
to go very far..."  

Michael G
Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579
Nashville
10 posted 2001-05-12 12:00 PM


Thank you one and all for your words, it feels good to be back after a small vacation from here,
Michael

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