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The Ride
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The Ride |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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The Ride I hold my breath as I take my spin again my turn on the world’s whirlwind panic sets in I grab to steady myself but I have neatly placed everything on the shelf chaos now born as I see things pass by perception strained blurred before my eyes I am now deaf can not hear a sound another revolution’s distort takes me round screaming in silence I beg for composure from prying eyes naked in this exposure rotating through reality fast my aching head feels light sweat pours from my skin in paralyzed frozen fright reeling, whirling then twisting when I’m about to drop things spin around again then suddenly stop I push through the crowd in your eyes I look stern with a heavy heart knowing, it will soon be your turn "...the rest is silence" (Hamlet) Shakespeare |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Very nice flow , Wonderful  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
really cool write deep emotions o yuh |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I was getting dizzy just reading this...intense! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OneSlickLady~ Shades of 'Stop The World ... I Want To Get Off' ! Understand this one well. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Amature2 Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 416 |
I hear the ride controller yelling "Do You Want To Go Faster" ? Nice ride enjoyed it very much, 1slick_lady |
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painted lady Junior Member
since 2001-04-01
Posts 48on the wing or nectaring |
"with a heavy heart knowing, it will soon be your turn" this reminds me of a too scary ride at the county fair when I was a kid. this whole thing is scary, lady. like that ending, tho ... kind of grabbed the reader by the throat. And then my heart with pleasure fills, |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
I just hope, when it is our turn, we only have to go once!! That is one wild bumpy ride! Good writing. ME |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I always feel "what goes around, comes around" and sometimes things just have a way of working out if you step off the merry-go-round and just watch........Helen, I enjoyed this so much this morning, you have no idea! Kathleen Blake |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
is it more fun when we watch someone else going through it??? great poem helen. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
No, it's not more fun to watch someone else go through something, that's not what I meant, I meant watch your life...your day.....life.....and let it happen Kathleen Blake |
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