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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2001-05-07 03:57 PM


I was almost there with you,
today, you sat upon the roof.
I could feel your breath in ear,
fingers wailing "you're not here!"
Every word you spoke to me
I saw your lips pout perfectly
and every word you left unsaid,
I'll pencil in--and dream instead.

Everything, you are? You're NOT.
and everything, you're not? You ARE.
You are but my quandary.
Be still and hush, make love to me.

Take me under lion's eyes--
for once a predator in weep.
all my love--is honest lie
the torture of a night's unsleep.

You---you make me smile, you know.
I touched my lips just now; I glow.
The blush that rises on my cheek--
Damn you, you have made me weak.

I wish I had a blanket spread.
I wish I had a squire's bed.
I wish my fingers were a spool
for every hair upon your head.

Tantalize me with your tongue,
take me on the roof, undone...
unafraid to meet the sky
in spread of wings, with you, I fly....

[This message has been edited by serenity (edited 05-07-2001).]

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Irish Rose
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1 posted 2001-05-07 04:12 PM


hard to choose a favorite line but these two were spectacular:

I wish I had a blanket spread.
                   I wish I had a squire's bed."

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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Deep in the heart
2 posted 2001-05-07 04:32 PM


Write on whilst I take a cold shower  

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


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3 posted 2001-05-07 06:47 PM


woo hoo!!!

Look. . . I'm flying!!!  

love this one serenity. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Dennis
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4 posted 2001-05-07 06:55 PM


sure, I remember that song...upon the roof...but it never sounded as sweet as this!

Dennis

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5 posted 2001-05-07 08:30 PM


Serenity~
This entire write is just WONDERFUL !

Me likum ...

'Take me under lion's eyes--
for once a predator in weep.
all my love--is honest lie
the torture of a night's unsleep.

You---you make me smile, you know.
I touched my lips just now; I glow.
The blush that rises on my cheek--
Damn you, you have made me weak.'


YEAH ....  
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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6 posted 2001-05-07 11:12 PM


"tantalize me with your tongue" sent me through the ceiling..you do have a way with roofs, er, words  
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7 posted 2001-05-08 12:27 PM


On the roof...I sure hope it's not one of those real slanty ones.  Be careful up there, and enjoy.  
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8 posted 2001-05-08 01:08 AM


Girl...this was GOOD!  Loved it!
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9 posted 2001-05-08 09:50 AM


serenity, I didn't know a roof could be such a great meeting spot. I think I own a ladder.  
Very nice write.  

parker

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10 posted 2001-05-08 10:15 AM


enjoy
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11 posted 2001-05-10 06:24 AM


" Everything, you are? You're NOT.
and everything, you're not? You ARE.
You are but my quandary.
Be still and hush, make love to me."

You never cease to amaze me with your wonderful writing.

"Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our
feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly." ~unknown


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12 posted 2001-05-10 07:18 AM


Its got quite warm in here all of a sudden... maybe its a hot tin roof, lol sorry. Liked this very much, thank you.

Regards,
Olias.

serenity blaze
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13 posted 2001-05-11 07:19 AM


Thanks all. This one of course, was for m'love. Charge dem batteries, babie! I'm missing you again.....
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