When We Make Love...sonnet #6

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Balladeer

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0 posted 2001-05-04 08:38 PM

When we make love, the gates will open wide
To treasures I had never come to know
And I will live with happiness inside
Delighting in the richness of your glow.

When we make love, all pain will disappear
Erased by all the joy you make me feel.
Our day of blissful joy is drawing near
To taste the nectar our love will reveal.

When we make love, our hearts and souls will blend
As essences now mingled into one.
Toward Heaven's path my spirit will ascend
To harvest golden apples of the sun.

Should fate decree we'll not taste passion's thrill
Rest easy knowing I will love you still.

redwriter1
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1 posted 2001-05-04 09:11 PM

Nice to see you Balladeer. Sounds like you're speaking of someone you have never met. MmmmMm someone on the net perhaps? (grin)..

I posted something a few days ago.... would enjoy your thoughts on it.

and. p.s.

Anticipation of the sweetest kind is waiting to be in your lover's arms. (i agree)

Temptress

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2 posted 2001-05-04 09:16 PM

I know this well and you write of it beautifully, sir.

Nice to see you here.

Denise

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3 posted 2001-05-04 10:06 PM

One of my all time favorites, Michael. Lovely.

Kit McCallum

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4 posted 2001-05-04 10:21 PM

"Should fate decree we'll not taste passion's thrill
Rest easy knowing I will love you still."

What a beautifully lyrical and melodic flow to this tender piece Michael. The rhyme scheme is absolutely lovely, and the sentiments ... ah, the sentiments .... simply wonderful. 'Tis a gem.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Paula Finn
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5 posted 2001-05-04 10:32 PM

Ah sir...I especially like the closing lines...because love is more than making love...

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2001-05-04 10:45 PM

When we make love, our hearts and souls will blend
As essences now mingled into one.
Toward Heaven's path my spirit will ascend
To harvest golden apples of the sun.

Should fate decree we'll not taste passion's thrill
Rest easy knowing I will love you still.
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Ahhhh the cadence, the imagery, the emotion and devotion...
and all dressed up in a sonnet...
this is beauty Deer...*sigh* *L*
romantic and passionate ...
like spam and vienna sausages on the same plate

very well done poet sir...
tis a pleasure to see your smiling face here.

you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

Nan

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7 posted 2001-05-04 10:48 PM

The only thing better than reading this wonderful work of art is hearing it recited... Now THAT's an experience...

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8 posted 2001-05-04 11:02 PM

i agree with every comment here....

Andrew Scott
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9 posted 2001-05-05 03:15 AM

Sir Balladeer: YOU DA MAN!

I bow to you and yours.

PS. Thanks for looking in on Bed Monster. Peace!

Sunshine

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10 posted 2001-05-05 06:56 AM

Wow....I take a five minute break at [check the hour, I'm CST...] to see what I've missed...

and get a royal treat!

I keep trying to write sonnets, but always...come up short. I think I need to try just a little harder....

this is wonderful, 'Deer. Well done!

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11 posted 2001-05-05 08:36 AM

Should fate decree we'll not taste passion's thrill
Rest easy knowing I will love you still.

Beautiful...
~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Kethry
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12 posted 2001-05-05 10:39 AM

OhI wish that I could hear it, however the ear of my mind will hear it whispering on the breeze.
S' Wonderful Deer. A cornucopia of emotion. My cup runneth over. And the line about the golden apples,... superb.
Keth

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

[This message has been edited by Kethry (edited 05-05-2001).]

Joyce Johnson

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13 posted 2001-05-05 11:33 AM

This is a lovely, gentle poem. Joyce

Irish Rose
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14 posted 2001-05-05 12:47 PM

yes, it's lovely and I agree with everyone, love is more than the physical act., real love is almost spiritual. You say it well.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

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15 posted 2001-05-05 01:40 PM

Breath-taking, Balladeer, enjoyed reading!

~Tier

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16 posted 2001-05-05 02:44 PM

Saturday - is turning into a red letter day for me - each poem I chose to read is a gem, and this one especially

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17 posted 2001-05-05 04:10 PM

such beautiful words and such lovely ryms i thought this was an wonderful piece...thanks for sharing and keep writing....

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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18 posted 2001-05-05 04:55 PM

*sigh*.....love this sonnet....love the lines.....love the imagine....love it all.

Did I told you that I love this piece, if not well I do Love it very much.

((hugs))
Charisma

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19 posted 2001-05-05 08:47 PM

My thanks to all of you wonderful people for such glowing comments....I appreciate you all very much

Corinne
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20 posted 2001-05-05 09:48 PM

This is so beautiful, one of your best, in my book!

Corinne

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