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Martie
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0 posted 2001-05-03 11:35 PM


Roses Roses Scattered Petals  

Homes with shaded vestibules
filled with greenly moist profusion,
windows filled with lives unspoken
like a photo of strife or comfort,
hear the chaos feel the peace.

See the polished hardwood floor,
table inviting with four chairs
flowers picked so fresh and sweet
from a garden of straight lines.

In a second floor apartment,
smell of cigarettes hangs heavy,
woman opens with three children,
table filled with unpaid bills.

Hospice smiles and cool walls
silked with flowers everlasting,
doors the color of pale skin
gently tended by special hands.

Inside this Spanish living room
with the feel of ancient class,
groomed and spreads across my vision
away from my insistent clutter.

Roses roses scattered petals,

another day in the life
of a flower delivery girl.



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1 posted 2001-05-04 12:25 PM


exceptional images, very diverse.  remarkable

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2 posted 2001-05-04 12:27 PM


yes, wonderful images and the ending!!!  I love this!!!!
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3 posted 2001-05-04 02:30 AM


Oh I was so relieved with the last line.  Well written suspensful poem. Joyce
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4 posted 2001-05-04 02:34 AM


Martie,

I think what I really like about this one is that it has a "real" feel to it, the many lifestyles that people live.  This is good writing, my friend.  I enjoyed it much.

Michael

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5 posted 2001-05-04 06:30 AM


It's not Friday without reading Martie...

"Homes with shaded vestibules
filled with greenly moist profusion,"

these lines just grinned at me....

Nan
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6 posted 2001-05-04 07:03 AM


A flower delivery girl... hm... what a wonderfully happy job... Nicely said, Martie..
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7 posted 2001-05-04 07:41 AM


This is a wonderfully visual peek into the diversity you've seen Martie, very nicely written!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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8 posted 2001-05-04 08:22 AM


The visuals in this are wonderful Martie.  Well penned.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

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9 posted 2001-05-04 09:51 AM


Martie....very touching...sensitive. A lovely ending.  Bob
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10 posted 2001-05-04 11:19 AM


Most excellent work, Martie...

So glad that this was the first I chose to feast my eyes upon after being away...

Regards,
Sudhir

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11 posted 2001-05-04 06:18 PM


And what an interesting little day it was...I am glad I got to share it with you, thanks.

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12 posted 2001-05-04 07:09 PM


thank God for your last lines - I was imagining all that in a single home - hospice, fatherless kids - etc - Sheesh -
you are fantastic
my admiration continues to grow!

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13 posted 2001-05-04 11:09 PM


Homes with shaded vestibules
filled with greenly moist profusion,
windows filled with lives unspoken
like a photo of strife or comfort,
hear the chaos feel the peace.
========================
Hospice smiles and cool walls
silked with flowers everlasting,
doors the color of pale skin
gently tended by special hands.

Roses roses scattered petals,
=============================

and you scatter those petals for us in such a way that we were there with you in each
walk of life.....
all the smells, sights and sounds...
very cool poem flower-girlie-girl  
dont forget to kiss a carnation for me *S*

you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive

~Sarah McLachlan~

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14 posted 2001-05-05 12:05 PM


Friends--Leave out the traffic and the streets that are cut up in little pieces...and the unanswered doors...and the country music on the radio...and this is exactly the way it was...thank you so much for letting me take you with me.
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15 posted 2001-05-05 01:21 PM


Martie~
I just found this ...
Was this my kiss of inspire ?

Roses roses scattered petals

I think perhaps without knowing ... it was ~

Thank you 'flower delivery girl' !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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16 posted 2001-05-05 06:59 PM


I enjoyed this very much.  Thank you....Sue

Suetang

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17 posted 2001-05-05 11:03 PM


this is Lovely Martie~


Greeneyes~


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