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Janet Marie
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0 posted 2001-05-03 05:23 PM


I try so hard, this ache to erase,
try to deny this lingering trace.
Still I cant shake this want of touch,
cant let go of something needed so much.

Your kiss has left a lasting impress,
as did the pleasures of your caress.
I can still hear you whispering my name,
the memory still burns, still makes me insane.

I'm tired of being patient, my patience is wearing thin,
patience wont cool this ache, wont absolve this sweet sin.
What I want is one long lover's dance with you,
a chance to touch in the hours of midnight blue.

I want to lie with you beneath cool sheets, bodies bare,
then drown mercifully in the depths of your hungry stare.
I want to explore your length from head to toe,
then bronze your body in afterglow.

I want to wake with your taste upon my lips,
feel your skin tighten with teases of stroking fingertips.
Let me pull your tides ... set your suns,
then do it all again when day is done.

I want to take you to new heights of content,
ride the waves of you until we're spent.
I need to feel your rhythm, your passions rise,
witness the intensity, the white hot heat in your eyes.

For so long now I've been owned by this,
captivated by the promise of gifted kiss.
For just one night to sate this ache,
in willing acquiescence, my name to forsake.

I surrender to this unending want of you,
to this desire and inspire, I remain true.
To this ache I am eternally enslaved,
upon my soul, unrequited engraved.

Your touch to grant merciful reprieve,
to finally believe in contentment's conceive.
When this night fades to the light of morn,
by impassioned kiss I am reborn.

And should this ache return when the shadows fall,
'tis better to have had ... than to have never had at all.


Janet Marie


~Possession~
BY: Sarah McLachlan
from the CD: Fumbling Towards Ecstacy

Listen as the wind blows from across the great divide
voices trapped in yearning, memories trapped in time
the night is my companion, and solitude my guide
would I spend forever here and not be satisfied?


And I would be the one
to hold you down
kiss you so hard
I'll take your breath away
and after, I'd wipe away the tears
just close your eyes dear


Through this world I've stumbled
so many times betrayed
trying to find an honest word to find
the truth enslaved
oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive



And I would be the one
to hold you down
kiss you so hard
I'll take your breath away
and after, I'd wipe away the tears
just close your eyes dear


Into this night I wander
it's morning that I dread
another day of knowing of
the path I fear to tread
oh into the sea of waking dreams
I follow without pride
nothing stands between us here
and I won't be denied




[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 05-03-2001).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-05-03 05:26 PM


Now you've got me aching, too...what a read...and some wonderful lines...

ah shoot, where are the Kleenex when we need them....

walker
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2 posted 2001-05-03 05:28 PM


Sensual, romantic your Unending Ache. Thanks for sharing!
ParisGrl
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3 posted 2001-05-03 05:40 PM


Janet Marie,

I loved this!  its true......tis better to have had then not to have had at all.  

Laura

PoeticKnight
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4 posted 2001-05-03 05:50 PM


Hey, this one is great! A little on the adult side jm, but what the hell. LOL Great lines and patterns you did here. I love the ending.

And should this ache return when the shadows fall,
'tis better to have had ... than to have never had at all.



serenity blaze
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5 posted 2001-05-03 06:14 PM


I happen to know a great cure for this! Want his number?   Dreamy and Steamy as only you can do, me girl! Loved this!
Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2001-05-03 06:58 PM


JM, this is so tender, so loving, so passionate, and so Well Written!  Wonderful jm...

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

Mother_Earth
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7 posted 2001-05-03 07:12 PM


Oh, boy, and my glasses are so fogged up I can't see to write any more!!  You did good.  Hugs ME
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8 posted 2001-05-03 07:15 PM


So you were the girl in Fight Against Form's Bed.  This is very sensual but a good poem.  Joyce
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9 posted 2001-05-03 07:32 PM


'I want to lie with you beneath cool sheets, bodies bare,
then drown mercifully in the depths of your hungry stare.
I want to explore your length from head to toe,
then bronze your body in afterglow.

I want to wake with your taste you upon my lips,
feel your skin tighten with teases of stroking fingertips.
Let me pull your tides ... set your suns,
then do it all again when day is done.

I want to take you to new heights of content,
ride the waves of you until we're spent.
I need to feel your rhythm, your passions rise,
witness the intensity, the white hot heat in your eyes.'

Um...whoa...to say this is intense would be like saying that chocolate is 'okay...'     This is utterly fantastic work, JM...but, I shouldn't sound so surprised, because I'm not...needless to say, I love this, m'friend!

sp  

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

jwesley
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10 posted 2001-05-03 07:46 PM


Wonderful again, my friend...and by the way, love that CD...listen to it often!

jwesley

JLR
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11 posted 2001-05-03 07:46 PM


Aching days all around...you are in much company.  Touched me with this one!
Temptress
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12 posted 2001-05-03 08:12 PM


Janet Marie,
THIS is utterly fantastic, and to say it is passionate just wouldn't do it justice. I LOVED this. And...Yanno..We seem to have the same taste in music because I LOVE that song too!

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

Irish Rose
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13 posted 2001-05-03 08:14 PM


very, very nice and very sensual, Janet Marie.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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14 posted 2001-05-03 10:09 PM


better to have lost and lost than never had?....absolutely..this is beautiful, JM  
Martie
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15 posted 2001-05-03 10:16 PM


Big sigh and a hug...
latin passion
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16 posted 2001-05-03 10:29 PM


~~JM~~ Marie gracious and pure to heart. Dervived from Mary. Compassionate and sweet. For your poem took my breath away to your place in heaven. Heavens' stars will look down on those two, dancing to the seductions music created by you. You gave megoosebumps and longing, aching needs too for my soul mate.LP

He is my pen, I am but the paper he
writes on.
~~3LW~~SM

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17 posted 2001-05-03 11:05 PM


Janet Marie,

I can't imagen coming here and not seeing your words of devotion....not feeling your expression of emotion, and not experiencing your heart with each write....again for today I am thankful.... hugs to you....peace dear friend....


....Lauren~


***

Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."


Rosebud1229
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18 posted 2001-05-03 11:15 PM


sizzlinggggggggggg, to say the least wow Janet once again you've wrote a fabulous poem, loved this.
Parker
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19 posted 2001-05-03 11:52 PM


Janet, i'mmmmm back.  

This was pure Janet, moth desire..
Come to the blue flame browneye's, come and let that electricity wash right over you.  

"I want to explore your length from head to toe,
then bronze your body in afterglow."

girl this is a tan I could use...  

Parker

Kit McCallum
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20 posted 2001-05-04 07:58 AM


"I surrender to this unending want of you,
to this desire and inspire, I remain true.
To this ache I am eternally enslaved,
upon my soul, unrequited engraved."

Oh my, oh my ... I felt this one sweet poet.  Powerfully written, the ache, the need, the longing are all drawn out beautifully with the strength of the desire penned within these lines. Excellent flow, and a wonderful write JM!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

tracie66
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21 posted 2001-05-04 08:28 AM


WOW!! Janny girl this is devine, just loved it and the last line, I have always believed

'tis better to have had ... than to have never had at all

*S*
~HUGS~
Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Sudhir Iyer
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22 posted 2001-05-04 11:32 AM


O Janet, this is so brilliant...

Great!!!!

regards,
sudhir

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23 posted 2001-05-04 02:42 PM


oh lady.....you do write this ache that owns us so well.....sigh.....what more can I say? *shakes her head*...keep writing lady, your words are exquisite  
Jamie
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24 posted 2001-05-04 05:09 PM


Outstanding JM!
Enjoyed it a lot.

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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25 posted 2001-05-04 07:09 PM


You weave pure magic girlie when you ache
and burn at the same time...if S'en is
handing out phone #'s then I'll get in
line...and Parker there won't be any tan
lines from this bronzing   oooooooooooh
ya...but just for the heck of it...I've got
some time to burn...I'll look for some
...sorry J.M. couldn't resist...lol

The cadance kissed verses are pure gold
baby...you weave it like a butterfly
baby..and I feel the breeze of the warm air
lifting your little wings **winkie winkie**
Beautiful baby...beautiful~

SEA
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26 posted 2001-05-04 07:13 PM


.......whew.......Janet, this is wonderful!! LOVE it!!    SEA
redwriter1
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27 posted 2001-05-04 09:25 PM


Your kiss has left a lasting impress...
? ( we call that cheating in songwriting) lol I'm just teasin ya..


I loved all the emotion in this piece.. totally.......!!!

Very ........ truthful and raw.

Please continue..........  

Janet Marie
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28 posted 2001-05-04 10:27 PM


Thank you all for these fun, and endearing replies...Im so pleased you enjoyed this...
I sure did enjoy writing it  
I was cracking up at some of these replies..
and I'm thinking Im not the only one drinking
raspberry tea *L*
Sorry I took so long to reply to this...
its been hectic around here lately...
(it aint easy being a moth)    
hugs and smooches to the forum, you guys are the best
love to poetry land.

you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive

~Sarah McLachlan~

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29 posted 2001-05-05 04:22 AM


Of course you knew I'd love this one too! Sensational write Janet, take care!

"Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our
feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly." ~unknown


Nate Dogg
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30 posted 2001-05-07 12:27 PM


Janet, you've wrapped me in your poetry...a very nice write!!

Nathan

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